Wikipedia:Peer review/Pearl (X)/archive1


I've listed this article for peer review because... I would love for this article to become a Featured Article, but I'm unsure if it is meeting the standard yet. Please be nice, but honest when giving comments. Thanks, FishLoveHam (talk) 14:33, 27 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Dxneo

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Hello FishLoveHam, I am going to review this article's references. Please bare with me. Oh, I'd appreciate it if you took two minutes of your time to check out this peer review and leave your opinion. dxneo (talk) 17:22, 27 September 2024 (UTC)[reply]


Maddy from Celeste

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Doing a quick read through the prose first. -- Maddy from Celeste (WAVEDASH) 10:26, 10 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

  • The actress added that herself and West were particularly interested in the desires and fears of the characters. – Is herself correct here? I'm not a native anglophone, but I'd probably just write: She added that she and West..., seeing as there is also no need to disambiguate between multiple female referents. Similarly, I think "the actress" can be replaced with "she" or "Goth" in several places.
  • The second paragraph under "Development" feels unfocused to me, starting with a sentence about makeüp and proceeding to various other topics. Maybe a topic sentence could be added to tie it together?
  • Goth was scheduled to return to the part of Pearl in addition to contributing to the film's script—this being the first time she had written for one. – There's something strange about that last clause, I feel. I think it could be reworded to feel a bit more natural.
  • Because Pearl was filmed so soon after X, Goth explained that it helped her imagine a younger version of her character because she was familiar with the cast and set. – This is technically not grammatical, I believe – what does it refer to? I'd say something like Goth explained that Pearl being filmed so soon after X helped her...
  • This is a terrible nitpick, but contractions like isn't and doesn't aren't used outside of quotes in articles.

Some comments loosely based on the FA criteria follow. -- Maddy from Celeste (WAVEDASH) 19:36, 13 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@FishLoveHam: ping since it's been a moment since the last review. -- Maddy from Celeste (WAVEDASH) 19:36, 13 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
I'm so sorry, I wasn't aware you had left these comments! I'll address them soon! FishLoveHam (talk) 21:16, 13 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

This is my first encounter with this film series, so I may not be the best to judge this, but this article seems comprehensive; I am not left wondering about anything, other than why I haven't heard of this apparently excellent series before.

A quick look at the references suggests they're of good quality, in this case meaning mostly well-known publishers of film reviews.

This article seems stable enough, no edit wars or disputes. Lots of recent copyëdits in the history, make sure to get that all finished before submitting for FAC.

The lead section looks appropriately proportioned to me. The heading structure leaves nothing to be desired. The citation style is consistent.

Media is of course limited by the nature of the topic, but I think the files used are well-chosen and high quality.

I don't think the length is a problem, unless it of course turns out some significant aspect has been neglected so far.

@Maddy from Celeste: Comments have been addressed! FishLoveHam (talk) 10:44, 15 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Nice! I haven't been involved with the FA process before, so I can't comment on how a nomination now would go, but from what I can tell, this is a very good article. -- Maddy from Celeste (WAVEDASH) 18:05, 16 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks! FishLoveHam (talk) 20:50, 17 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]