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I've listed this article for peer review because it needs another set of eyes before a GA nomination. I need feedback on issues with the article. Thanks, Kges1901 (talk) 10:22, 11 November 2015 (UTC)
Comments. As always, feel free to revert my copyediting. - Dank (push to talk)
- "He reportedly showed personal courage": The difference between this and "He showed personal courage" is that the first expresses some doubt. What in the sources suggests doubt?
- I copyedited down to World War II. These are my edits. - Dank (push to talk) 02:36, 19 November 2015 (UTC)
- The problem is the only source for his personal courage, Kiselev, was written during the Soviet Union and could be ideologically biased. Kges1901 (talk) 09:04, 19 November 2015 (UTC)
- That's a hard problem, and different Wikipedian writers will handle that problem in different ways. All I can say is, "reportedly" doesn't tell the reader what you meant ... they'll have to guess, and different readers will guess different things, so "reportedly" is ambiguous, at best. - Dank (push to talk) 14:13, 19 November 2015 (UTC)
- Would it be better just to remove the sentence? Voronov doesn't say anything about it in his memoirs. Kges1901 (talk) 20:00, 19 November 2015 (UTC)
- That's probably what I'd do. - Dank (push to talk) 20:15, 19 November 2015 (UTC)
- Would it be better just to remove the sentence? Voronov doesn't say anything about it in his memoirs. Kges1901 (talk) 20:00, 19 November 2015 (UTC)
- That's a hard problem, and different Wikipedian writers will handle that problem in different ways. All I can say is, "reportedly" doesn't tell the reader what you meant ... they'll have to guess, and different readers will guess different things, so "reportedly" is ambiguous, at best. - Dank (push to talk) 14:13, 19 November 2015 (UTC)
- The problem is the only source for his personal courage, Kiselev, was written during the Soviet Union and could be ideologically biased. Kges1901 (talk) 09:04, 19 November 2015 (UTC)
Comments
- Dead link
- Suggest expanding the lead to two paragraphs
- Suggest listing awards in the infobox rather than listing some and having images for others, particularly multiples
- Was his external degree in a particular subject?
- What happened to his father? Nikkimaria (talk) 14:21, 27 November 2015 (UTC)
- Fixed dead link
- There isn't anything in his memoirs about his father's ultimate fate
- changed infobox to something like the FA Ivan Bagramyan
- his memoirs say external degree examination for matriculation
- If the lead is expanded, what should the second paragraph contain Kges1901 (talk) 10:03, 28 November 2015 (UTC)