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I've listed this article for peer review because after 3 failed FACs straight on other articles, I want to get a good want that'll actually pass. If reviewers could, post all their prose issues, because I cannot read bad prose as easy as others. Anyway, if you guys could, thanks.
Thanks again, Mitchazenia : Chat Trained for the pen 10:11, 24 April 2009 (UTC)
Ruhrfisch comments: Interesting article - Here are some suggestions for improvement.
- Much as I like Pennsylvania, it seems odd to have four images of PA roads (3 maps and a sign) in an article on a New York road. The sign for the PA highway seems unnecessary to me. I also am not sure what the two maps that are so similar add - why not one map? I think I prefer File:PA 346 (1949).png.
- Also why not show a USGS topo map of the route in New York before the reservoir was created?
- Per WP:MOS#Images, Avoid sandwiching text between two images that face each other
- The lead does not mention the Indian Reservation, but looking at maps and the article's description, much of the highway runs through the reservation and this should be in the lead.
- Avoid wording like "current day" - this gets out of date, try as of 2009 instead.
- Is there any way that rough distances could be added to the Route description?
- Is there any history of the route prior to 1930? My guess is that the road following the river must be pretty old, perhaps even as a Native American path? The state park was established in 1921 according to its article - was the road there then?
- The history of the Kinzua Dam and Allegheny reservoir are also pretty well established and should be more detailed than just "Allegany Reservoir, constructed in the mid-1960s.[9]"
- Watch overlinking - Allegheny Reservoir is linked several times (once in lead and in article is enough) and US dollar is too - my guess is that a link to US $ is not needed in an article on a US highway
- The National Bridge Inventory can be linked to the online version - see Cogan House Covered Bridge for an example of this.
- The maps you use show Corydone as being north of the Cornplanter Reservation, but the article says the community of Corydon (within the Cornplanter Indian Reservation)
- I would see if you can get someone to copyedit it - the language needs to be polished - sorry, I don't do copyedits.
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Hope this helps. If my comments are useful, please consider peer reviewing an article, especially one at Wikipedia:Peer review/backlog (which is how I found this article). Yours, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 03:53, 1 May 2009 (UTC)
- I googled "Cattaraugus County, New York History" and found this book online. It mentions a road along the river by 1821 and a previous native trail. Ruhrfisch ><>°° 10:59, 1 May 2009 (UTC)
- I looked the region up in a book I have access to. There was a (Native American) Cattaraugus Path that ran along the Allegheny River there (does not say which bank though). It ran from Cattaraugus down Buffalo Creek to the river at Salamanca and split there - one branch went west along the Allegheny to Cornplanter's Town (reservation?), then on to Conewango (Warren, PA) and Venango (Franklin, PA). The other branch went east to Ichsua (Olean NY). The ref is
- Wallace, Paul A.W. (1987). Indian Paths of Pennsylvania (Fourth Printing ed.). Harrisburg, Pennsylvania: Pennsylvania Historical and Museum Commission. p. 33. ISBN 978-0-89271-090-4. Note: ISBN refers to the 1998 impression.
- Hope this helps, Ruhrfisch ><>°° 03:08, 2 May 2009 (UTC)