Wikipedia:Peer review/Miami, Florida/archive1

Miami, Florida

I been working in this article recently and I think it may be ready for FA standards, I got the History of Miami, Florida one to FA, and I want this one to be next. Any advise before I continue? Thanks --Jaranda ^{wat's sup} 23:48, 1 March 2006 (UTC)

I renominated this page because it has improved since it's last peer review, and would like to see it as a featured article. --Arigont 8:41, 6 January 2007 (UTC)

• Very nice, I'd neaten up the image structure a bit (standardize image justification and sizes), and perhaps reduce the number of subcategories. --PopUpPirate 00:13, 2 March 2006 (UTC)

• Nice work, Jaranda! Here are some of my comments/suggestions...
  • Sentences in the lead are far too frequent. Also there is no need for 2-3 sentence paragraphs. Please merge some of the sentences to promote flow.
  • If you're going to reference a main "History of Miami" article, there is no need for subsections within the History section of the Maimi article. Please summarize the contents per Wikipedia:Summary Style.
  • de-italicize oolite, limestone and ice ages. Not required per WP:MOS.
  • "Starting about 100,000 years ago, the Wisconsin glaciation..."
  • Stating that Miami is the 46th largest city in the country, without stating that the Miami metropolitan area is (possibly) among the 10 largest in the nation provides a wrong impression of the population of the city vis-a-vis the rest of the country. The Miami metropolitan area has over 4 million people, making it the second largest city in the Southeast, after Atlanta. [1].
  • "Other languages that are spoken..." is this list in any particular order? If this is a ranked order, cite sources and/or their respective percentages. If this is not in any ranked order, none of these should be mentioned since it could promote a misleading interpretation of the demographic buildup of the city.
  • "The latin and Caribbean-friendly atmosphere.." What is a Caribbean-friendly atmosphere??
  • Wikify the Miami Floridians, Miami Gatos, etc.
  • Wouldn't Scarface warrant a mention in Miami in television and film?
  • Please consolidate 2-3 sentence paragraphs in the article into more solid paragraphs.
  • Apart from all that, this is a well written article, well referenced. You might want to expand on some of the negative aspects of the city. There is only a short paragraph on crime. What are some of the other issues in the city?
• After these suggestions have been addressed, I will help with the copyediting effort before you promote the article to FAC. Thanks and good luck! AreJay 04:59, 2 March 2006 (UTC)

• Some comments/suggestions:
  • Definately combine the two "History" sections and go with the Wikipedia:Summary Style (see Hugo Chávez#Early life (1954–1992) on how to combine two main articles with summary style.
  • There are many one and two sentence paragraphs that need to be developed into substantive paragraphs (specifically the "Economy", "Media" and the "Sports" section require attention).
  • The "Media" section currently reads like a list of trivia, when you develop this section orient the discussion more towards the city rather than the film/show, consider filminflorida.com, filmiami.org, madeinmiami.org and other related tourism/economic development agencies.
  • The "Demographics" section can be prettied up with a little token chart, table or graph.
  • A map of the town would be most useful, preferably showing the street layout and notable places (airport, downtown, stadiums, etc.)
  • The hard services, like the provision of drinking water and sewage disposal are important/high-profile services that the article could benefit from an expansion on. Soft services, like parks and social services, would be nice, too. --maclean25 08:35, 3 March 2006 (UTC)