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List of Presidential Medal of Freedom recipients

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I've listed this article for peer review because the List of Presidential Medal of Freedom recipients has undergone some recent major work and I am looking for some feedback to be able to get the list to Featured List status. Any feedback or assistance with this page would be helpful.

Thanks, Flyguy33 (talk) 00:57, 23 November 2010 (UTC)

Finetooth comments: I have a few suggestions for improving this enormous and interesting list.

• The first thing that popped out at me was the layout. The featured lists that I'm familiar with tend to lay out groups of items in tables rather than bulleted lists flanked by lots of white space. You can find a list of featured lists about awards at WP:FL#Social sciences and society. See List of Nobel laureates in Chemistry for example, or Darwin Medal or List of Nobel laureates. I think you could improve this list by trying out varied organizational schemes that would present the information in tables; in some cases, it would probably help to make the columns sortable. Images could be sized in a uniform way to fit in an images column; Paul Harvey would be no bigger than Andy Griffith, for example. Arranging the material in tables would, as a side benefit, cut down on the table of contents, which is too long.

• The lead should include something about the history of the medal. How did it start? Who got the first medal? Who awarded the first medal?

• The tag at the top of the existing article should be addressed. Every set of statistics, every direct quotation, every claim that is apt to be questioned needs an inline citation to a source. In addition, every paragraph needs at least one source; if a single source supports an entire paragraph, the citation should go at the end of the paragraph, right after the terminal period of the last sentence.

• Many of the citations are malformed or incomplete. For example, citations to Internet sources should include author, title, publisher, date of publication, url, and date of most recent access, if all of these are known or can be found.

• The tools in the toolbox at the top of this review page find two dead links in citations and three links that go to disambiguation pages instead of their intended targets.

I hope these suggestions prove helpful. If so, please consider reviewing another article, especially one from the PR backlog at WP:PR; that is where I found this one. I don't usually watch the PR archives or check corrections or changes. If my comments are unclear, please ping me on my talk page. Finetooth (talk) 18:37, 3 December 2010 (UTC)

Bencherlite

As someone with some FLC experience, I can tell you that any list beginning "This is an alphabetized, partial list of recipients of the Presidential Medal of Freedom" will be opposed on prose grounds straight away. Make it interesting! You do not need to have the words "list of recipients of the Presidential Medal of Freedom" in the text, let alone in bold, and in fact it's probably best not to. Look at recent featured lists to see how they begin. Bencherlite^Talk 22:51, 14 December 2010 (UTC)