Wikipedia:Peer review/Article 153 of the Constitution of Malaysia/archive1

Article 153 of the Constitution of Malaysia

Just created article, so the references are a jumble until I can fix them up and add some print sources. Any suggestions? I really want to get something about the Malaysian affirmative action featured — if not this, then something like Bumiputra, Malaysian New Economic Policy or perhaps the currently uncreated Ketuanan Melayu. Johnleemk | Talk 13:20, 11 November 2005 (UTC)[reply]

Very nice! You've created a very impressive article already. Here's what I would suggest to improve it.
- I wouldn't include the full text of the article (the constitutional article that is). Perhaps this should be moved to WikiSource?
- One you get the references in place you really should consider inline citations.
- A good copyedit is needed by someone not invloved in the writing of this article. I've noticed a few minor things and I will endeavor to clean those up.
- The article needs some images. Certainly images of the people involved, the Democratic Action Party logo, pics of the race riots perhaps. Anything to break up the copy.

Overall, a very impressive article! *Exeunt* Ganymead ^Dialogue? 17:05, 11 November 2005 (UTC)[reply]

I got the text from Wikisource, actually. I decided to do so because I noticed the articles we have on the various articles of the American constitution have the full text. Then again, their articles are short and to the point, and not verbose like the Malaysian constitution. I am not very satisfied by the existing footnoting systems available, but I might consider Harvard style referencing or inotes. Copyleft images or images usable as fair use are hard to find, as Malaysia does not have many copyleft photographers, and the May 13 Incident is a very hushed up issue - everyone knows about it, but nobody discusses it. I have never seen a single photograph of the riots. I will do my best to procure suitable images of the people involved; some of them, such as Lim Kit Siang, can be contacted through email, so I may begin there. Johnleemk | Talk 17:57, 11 November 2005 (UTC)[reply]