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Lego Indiana Jones: The Original Adventures

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As of 6 January 2025, 11:41 (UTC), this page is active and open for discussion. An FAC coordinator will be responsible for closing the nomination.

• Featured article candidates/Lego Indiana Jones: The Original Adventures/archive1

Nominator(s): Vacant0 (talk • contribs) 14:38, 2 January 2025 (UTC)

This is a 2008 video game developed by Traveller's Tales that covers the first three Indiana Jones films. While the Smash Hit FAC was still going on, I was working on getting this article to GA status. After it was promoted to GA in October, I submitted it for a PR and worked on improving the prose and sources. I believe that most issues have been resolved, therefore I'm submitting this for FAC! Vacant0 (talk • contribs) 14:38, 2 January 2025 (UTC)

History6042 comments

• "removed entirely considering that Lego" -> "removed entirely, considering that Lego" History6042😊 (Contact me) 13:25, 5 January 2025 (UTC)
• "commended by reviewers but had conflicting opinions about" -> "commended by reviewers, but had conflicting opinions about" History6042😊 (Contact me) 13:25, 5 January 2025 (UTC)
• "cutscene appears which introduces the player" -> "cutscene appears that introduces the player" History6042😊 (Contact me) 13:25, 5 January 2025 (UTC)
• "The Lego Star Wars game series were a financial success" -> "The Lego Star Wars game series was a financial success" History6042😊 (Contact me) 13:25, 5 January 2025 (UTC)
• "is backward compatible with Xbox One" -> "is backward compatible with the Xbox One" History6042😊 (Contact me) 13:25, 5 January 2025 (UTC)
• "appreciated the crossover of Lego and Indiana Jones franchises" -> "appreciated the crossover of the Lego and Indiana Jones franchises" History6042😊 (Contact me) 13:25, 5 January 2025 (UTC)
• "gameplay more harder" -> "gameplay more difficult" History6042😊 (Contact me) 13:25, 5 January 2025 (UTC)
• "particularly due to the version's lightning, colours, and textures." -> "particularly due to the version's lightning, colours, and textures." Is this meant to be lightning or lighting? History6042😊 (Contact me) 13:25, 5 January 2025 (UTC)

  This was a typo. Vacant0 (talk • contribs) 22:15, 5 January 2025 (UTC)

• "PSP version in behind of the PlayStation and Wii versions." -> "PSP version behind the PlayStation and Wii versions." History6042😊 (Contact me) 13:25, 5 January 2025 (UTC)
• "when played on higher volume." -> "when played at higher volume." History6042😊 (Contact me) 13:25, 5 January 2025 (UTC)
• That's all I've got. History6042😊 (Contact me) 13:25, 5 January 2025 (UTC)

  All done. Vacant0 (talk • contribs) 22:15, 5 January 2025 (UTC)

  Alright, then I support. History6042😊 (Contact me) 01:17, 6 January 2025 (UTC)

  Thanks. Vacant0 (talk • contribs) 09:53, 6 January 2025 (UTC)

Comments from Z1720

I made some copyedits to the article: feel free to revert if not helpful. Some comments below:

Lead

• "The design of puzzles was altered to fit the Indiana Jones franchise, but any mentions of Nazism were removed entirely, considering that Lego replaced the figures with similar ones in its Indiana Jones Lego sets..." Perhaps: "The design of puzzles was altered to fit the Indiana Jones franchise, but any mentions of Nazism were removed, entirely, considering that as Lego replaced the figures with similar ones in its Indiana Jones Lego sets..."
• "The game was advertised at conventions, and a game demo, Flash Player web game, and computer-animated short film were published during the development." Perhaps "The game was advertised at conventions:, and a game demo, Flash Player web game, and computer-animated short film were published during the development."
• "It was later made available on Steam in 2009." Delete "later": this is implied with the later date mentioned afterwards
• "The Wii and Xbox 360 versions garnered praise; however, the PSP version was criticised for its puzzles, excessive loading times, and lack of multiplayer support." Perhaps, "The Wii and Xbox 360 versions garnered praise, but; however, the PSP version was criticised for its puzzles, excessive loading times, and lack of multiplayer support."

Gameplay

• "The game's primary mode is a two-player local co-op game, with a total of 84 characters," -> "The game's primary mode is a two-player local co-op game, with 84 playable characters,"
• "with a total of 84 characters, and in the absence of a human partner," Perhaps, "with a total of 84 characters;, and in the absence of a human partner,"

Reception

• This section is quite long. I think it can be reduced by combining the commentary and removing some quotes: if multiple sources agree with an assessment, they can be merged together instead of having a sentence for every source.
• Along with the above, the section has a lot of "X said Y" formatting. I think this section can have confidence that, if multiple sources agree with a perspective, multiple reference can be used at the end of a general statement instead of giving every source their own quote or statement.
• The "Console versions" section seems to jump around between different consoles. As a reader, it is sometimes jarring the amount of times the subsequent sentence will be about a different console. I think this can be resolved by dedicating paragraphs to specific consoles. While the fourth paragraph clearly focuses on the audio quality, the others I am less certain about.

Those are my thoughts. I hope this was helpful. Z1720 (talk) 03:53, 6 January 2025 (UTC)

All done. I hope that the Reception is better now. Vacant0 (talk • contribs) 09:53, 6 January 2025 (UTC)