Rskovach
Sandbox article - review
editHi. I have taken a look at your sandbox article. Overall, it appears well-written and encyclopedic, but there were some issues that I'd like to point out:
- Section 1.2 - First paragraph: The subsection goes into a description of the Fidesz party without explaining why that matters; it is better to start using something like "upon the election of (the two-thirds majority) Fidesz party in 2010 ... the government began a 'hands-on policy'". The main focus is the proposed museum project, not the history of Hungary's government.
- The line, "It was also suggested" is ambiguous because it does not mention who suggested these allegations...the watchdog? The museum? Or the public?
- Be sure to watch for the presence of any weasel words, e.g. some people say that these policies are the worst in history.
- Section 2.3 - Second paragraph: "Baán is no stranger to criticism nor controversy" - the tone of this particular paragraph leans more toward a newspaper editorial-style writing, rather than typical encyclpedic tone.
- Section 3.2 - It is a good idea to link junk status (currently a redirect to "high-yield debt", a form of credit rating) so that readers unfamiliar with economics are not confused about the nature of this statement.
- It may be a good idea to include an opening sentence or paragraph introducing the fact that similar places exist worldwide.
- A minor typographical note: instead of keyboard hyphens, the use of the en dash (& ndash ; –)
and em dash (& mdash ; —) are available through wiki-syntax. - The remaining issues are minor grammatical errors, i.e. state owned → state-owned, it's → its (Section 3.4 last paragraph, a common error), and Section 2.1: "a Fidesz campaign platform during to the 2010 elections" – fix this.
- Comment: where I live, it is more common to say "tourist site" than "touristic site", though there is likely great variation in different English-speaking parts of the world – is "touristic" more common where you're from?
Overall, the article is well-cited and well-formated using a variety of sources, and is almost ready for mainspace (immediate publishing). Your first article may also have relevant guidelines. Hope this helps! ~AH1 (discuss!) 03:11, 7 March 2012 (UTC)
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artðics
editHey, just wanted to pass along the article I talked about in class, which has a list of verbs/adjectives/adverbs to avoid and to help maintain a neutral POV. Another good article offers a list of commonly misused English words. Hope this helps! Azmcsbl (talk) 15:26, 31 March 2012 (UTC)
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Salviati
editNo, that reference was not put in place by me, and I have never read that book. Sorry. Indrian (talk) 03:40, 20 September 2012 (UTC)