Galeiga

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I've left a comment on your Articles for Creation submission, which can be viewed at Draft:Bonnie D. Parkin. Thanks! –MJL ‐Talk‐^☖ 02:05, 13 July 2019 (UTC)

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Whipple edits

Hi, I noticed that you were editing the Maurine Whipple page. It's a page I worked on quite a bit a few years ago, but I admit that I mostly summarized the Hale biography (I had trouble finding other scholarly sources about her life). It made me think about whether or not it's appropriate to include information about her infatuations on her Wikipedia page. On the one hand, it's helpful to get insight into her personality. On the other hand, it could infantalize her in a sexist way. I could tone it down a little more, or put her relationship difficulties into a separate section. As far as I know, there isn't a set way to do personal details like relationships on a page--I've seen good pages with the personal life integrated into the page as well as good pages with it having a separate section. What do you think would be best for her page? Rachel Helps (BYU) (talk) 16:08, 12 July 2021 (UTC)

Hello! To me it felt infantilizing and not related to why she is famous. If her infatuations with men influenced her literary work, then I could see a spot for it. In a book length work, it makes sense to go into that kind of depth. For a Wikipedia page, I don't think it makes sense. If I were famous for a book I wrote, I would hope my Wikipedia page wouldn't go into the boys I've liked who haven't liked me back. I don't see crushes showing up in men's biographies. I left in her marriage, divorce, and rape, since those seemed like the most important relationships. Unrequited love distracted from the reasons why she's famous, which is why I took it out. I think a separate section on personal life would be fine. If you want to go into that, it might be interesting to add how her father's dalliances may have influenced her relationships or more details of the marriage and divorce. Galeiga (talk) 21:48, 12 July 2021 (UTC)

Let me know what you think of the personal life section that I added. I added two quotes about her personality, and I fully acknowledge that Curtis Taylor's description of her as "childlike" is literally infantalizing her. But maybe she acted a bit like a child sometimes? I checked her biography out again, and she had several other romantic entanglements (and a whole chapter called "Devastating Romances") that don't appear to have influenced her fiction directly, which I didn't describe in detail. I also tried to attribute analysis of her life events more directly to Hale when possible. Rachel Helps (BYU) (talk) 18:36, 14 July 2021 (UTC)

I appreciate the quotes and attributions of subjective statements! That's great! It makes sense to go into detail about Clare Woodbury, since that influenced her literary work. Do we know much more about the marriage, divorce, and rape to put in? I'll see if I can find any more. One note on this sentence. When you wrote, "Whipple had other relationships with men, but they were not successful," what do you mean by "successful"? Not long lasting? Or just that they didn't work out? Galeiga (talk) 14:04, 15 July 2021 (UTC)

Hale described them as "devastating" and that was my attempt to soften that language. In one case, she kept trying to kindle a romance with a man she had a summer relationship with, and he suggested bringing in an attorney to ensure they had a clean break. After breakups, she would become very depressed. After her abortion, Hale states "She was deeply depressed and was probably suffering from what we would now call post-traumatic stress syndrome." (p. 91 if the 2011 Hale bio). It's difficult to tell how much of the information in the Hale biography is reliable, because her main source of information was Whipple herself, who was sometimes unreliable, and Whipple's pseudo-autobiographical story (which was partially fictionalized). There is a little more information about her marriage--her friend set her up and encouraged her to "settle," but they were unhappy together. Rachel Helps (BYU) (talk) 16:01, 19 July 2021 (UTC)