Talk:Zbrojovka Z 4/GA2

GA Review

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Nominator: CosXZ (talk · contribs) 18:15, 19 August 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: TheNuggeteer (talk · contribs) 03:43, 20 August 2024 (UTC)

Reviewing this article for WP:GARC, short and nice. Watch out for possible comments! 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 03:43, 20 August 2024 (UTC)

Here are my comments:

• "After the Z 9 sales results", "sales results" isn't neccesary, you can remove it.
• "prototype was designed", after was, you can add "later".
• You can split history by history before the car and after. Before the car will be "background", and after the production, it will be history.
• "the first series, of 500 cars, was sold out before its production" remove the commas and change where to was.
• "which began in May 1933." what do you mean by this sentence?
• "Between 1933 and 1936, four more production series, of successively improved versions, followed." Remove the 2nd and 3rd comma, and remove "of successively improved versions"
• A bit confused by ref 3, isn't it supposed to link to a source?
• "In 1934, a series of five racing cars was created" change was to were.
• If you want, change "Technical description" to "design".
• "The engine is equipped with battery ignition, the electrical" add "and" after the comma.
• "In front of the front axle" can cause confusion, remove the second "front". like "In front of the axle".
• There's a lot of information in source 5, you can add more.
• I see this source, this source, and this source, you can add these]

Done with the review, putting this on hold, hope you can fix this and eventually promote this to a good article! 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 04:17, 20 August 2024 (UTC)

@TheNuggeteer Done all Cos ^{(X + Z)} 21:40, 20 August 2024 (UTC)

Comments from Rollinginhisgrave

Hi, I'll add a few comments as I'm also participating in GARC.

• using a license from the car manufacturer DKW What is this license?
• develop a car on the same concept without using DKW's patented solutions awkward, rw
• by a group of designers who were redundant
• The Z 4 became the... produced in 1934 sentences are too choppy here
• A series of five racing cars were produced in 1934 What has this got to do with it?
• 1933-1936 use ndash
• The lede's paraphrasing of the body is too close. WP:CLOP
• was a success, use semicolon
• The production of the car was terminated by a decision of -> Production was terminated by
• chassis link
• production from April -> produced
• More wikilinks in the Engine and transmission section

Rollinginhisgrave (talk) 05:52, 20 August 2024 (UTC)

@Rollinginhisgrave done most of the comments Cos ^{(X + Z)} 21:41, 20 August 2024 (UTC)

@CosXZ: You still need to fix problem no. 2, 3, 9, and 11. 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 08:37, 21 August 2024 (UTC)

@TheNuggeteer @Rollinginhisgrave I think I fixed all the issues. Is there any more comments that you guys want to ask Cos ^{(X + Z)} 17:17, 21 August 2024 (UTC)

Passing the article. 🍗TheNuggeteer🍗 04:46, 22 August 2024 (UTC)

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