Talk:Wolverton–Newport Pagnell line/GA1

GA Review

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Comments:

1. The lead of the article is very short, Per WP:LEAD, the lead is supposed to be a sufficient summary of what is presented in the article.
2. Citations should not be in the lead.
3. What is LNWR an abbreviation for? This should be indicated.
4. "The canal closed in 1864.[1] Despite this, the railway when built did not run on the line of the old canal.[1]": If both sentences use the same source, it only needs to be indicated once.
5. "4 miles (6.4 km)" should have the adjective parameter on.
6. In sentence "The water supply for locomotives at Wolverton was insufficient, so a water column was built at the intermediate station of Bradwell.", "of" should be "in".
7. In sentence "Water came from the town's own supply, with many houses losing their supply.", you use "supply" twice. Can more variety in wording be used?
8. Combine the sentences "Despite this, the LNWR considered electrification of the line in 1904, believing such a scheme would bring about considerable savings. The idea never materialised."
9. Are there any historical picutures of the railroad that can be added to the article?

I am placing the article on hold. Dough4872 (talk) 23:20, 16 July 2009 (UTC)

I can't really think of anything else to put in the lead. Also, what do you mean by 'adjective parameter' for the convert template? I can't find any images either. Oliver Fury, Esq. message • contributions 23:41, 16 July 2009 (UTC)

Since the major issues have been resolved, I will pass the article. Dough4872 (talk) 00:17, 17 July 2009 (UTC)