Talk:Whitmore railway station

Suggestions for improving the article

• Every article should have a "lead" section, i.e. a brief introduction which tells readers what the article is about by summarising the main points of the article. See for example Stamford East railway station
• In the history section you need to be more informative about where the station was. Most people won't know where Whitmore or Baldwin's Gate are. Give the county, and the distance and direction from the nearest big town, e.g. "15 miles west of (wherever)".
• You need to use rather more formal language in an encyclopedia article. So instead of saying "This station brought in huge amounts of people..." say "The station was used by many passengers.." or something like that.
• Give a date for when the Stoke line opened
• The Coronation Scot information is interesting, but is it accurate? No mention of it in Land speed record for rail vehicles. If it is accurate, it should be included with the history, rather than being in a subsection on its own.
• In Wikipedia the way of writing a date is 29 June 1937, not "29th..."
• I have tidied up the prose a bit in the Buildings and location section.
• I'm not sure what this means: "However Whitmore became less and less important when new extensions were being added left right and centre." I think you probably mean "Whitmore station became less and less important, as new railway extensions were added to the network." "Left, right and centre" is too informal.
• Sources: I see you have based your article on a couple of community websites. Have you seen this site], which has some interesting photos? Have you looked in any railway histories to see if they have any information?

These ideas may help you to improve the article. Brianboulton (talk) 21:19, 8 October 2010 (UTC)