Talk:Whitall Perry

Latest comment: 4 years ago by DoubleGrazing in topic Lede

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This article does not have the unbiased and objective tone expected of an encyclopaedia. E.g. "This opus is a true Summa of the Philosophia perennis, namely a harvesting of the timeless spiritual wisdom ..." etc. 58.7.153.26 (talk) 14:54, 9 October 2012 (UTC)Reply

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The start of lede seems to have changed several times since this was first created, but the current incarnation is very poor IMO. It is meant to immediately set the context and give an idea of who this person is, and instead it just lists where and when (twice) he was born, and then launches on to some flaky narrative. One has to read quite far into the article to understand what it's at all about. Could someone who knows (= not me) capture this person's essence incl. his claim for notability in one sentence, please, along the lines of "Whitall Perry (DOB-DOD) was a Ruritanian mystic poet known for..." Thanks, -- DoubleGrazing (talk) 05:02, 21 July 2020 (UTC)Reply