Talk:USS Rudyerd Bay/GA1

Latest comment: 4 years ago by Peacemaker67 in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Peacemaker67 (talk · contribs) 10:43, 5 May 2020 (UTC)Reply


This article is in fine shape. Looks like you've ported my relevant comments from my reviews of her sisters over to here, but I have some additional comments:

  • can you work the boilers into the body?
  • generally you should try to keep footnotes in numerical order unless there is a reason (ie [3][2][4])
  • Invasion of Iwo Jima→invasion of Iwo Jima
  • link aerial torpedo, flagship, Luzon and tropical cyclone
  • SheRudyerd Bay rendezvoused with the Third Fleet
  • fix the 24-hour clock times
  • 13:10., just after noon
  • along with her sisters Kwajalein and Nehenta Bay
  • "Halsey found it judicious to assign Rudyerd Bay and her sister Anzio"
  • with the losts of most of its crew
  • Later that day, aAt 08:40
  • Invasion of Lingayen Gulf→invasion of Lingayen Gulf
  • Rudyerd Bay reamined
  • Invasion of Iwo Jima→invasion of Iwo Jima
  • USS Saginaw Bay (CVE-82)
  • Rear admiral→ Rear Admiral, there is another example of this
  • was the TBM-1CP reconnaissance plane in the air or on the carrier when it was hit?
  • where a squadron of Japanese kamikaze aircraft were operated→from which Japanese kamikaze aircraft were being launched
  • link sortie
  • this seems weird, the following para seems to be duplicated in full"On 8 October, Rudyerd Bay arrived at San Francisco, underwent repairs and alterations to enable her to carry troops, then joined the "Magic-Carpet" fleet. Into the new year, she brought veterans of the Pacific war back to the United States. On 23 January 1946, she completed her last trans-Pacific run; and on 18 February, she departed California for the east coast. Transiting the Panama Canal on 28 February, she off-loaded aircraft at Jacksonville, Florida, in early March, and proceeded to Boston to begin inactivation.[8]"
  • Rudyerd Bay' received 5five battle stars
  • ShipbuildingHistory.com and Hazegray.org are marginally acceptable at GA, but I wouldn't be relying on them at Milhist ACR or FAC
  • THalsey's Typhoon looks like a typo

That's it. Placing on hold for the above to be addressed. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 06:44, 6 May 2020 (UTC)Reply