Talk:The Oregon Trail (1985 video game)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 21:35, 31 January 2022 (UTC)

Hello! I'll be taking a look at this article for the January 2022 GAN backlog drive. If you haven't already signed up, please feel free to join in! Although QPQ is not required, if you're feeling generous, I also have a list of GA nominations of my own right here.

Oooh! Good choice, PresN! Panini!^🥪 18:25, 1 February 2022 (UTC)

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Infobox and lede

• Slightly alter the wikilinks so that the split is "text-based game / by the same name" and not "text-based / game of the same name"
• "by the same name" → "of the same name"
• "over ten months in 1984 and 1985" → "over a ten-month period from 1984 to 1985."
• "it" in it was bought by SoftKey is vague
• been described as a cultural landmark by whom?

• @GhostRiver: Done. --PresN 02:30, 3 February 2022 (UTC)

Gameplay

• Commas after "Independence, Missouri" and "Williamette Valley, Oregon" per MOS:GEOCOMMA
• "characters profession" → "character's profession"
• "which correspond" → "which corresponds"
• "to start the journey with" → "with which to start the journey"
• "If the party reached" → "If the party reaches"
• "and they can add an epitaph"

Development

Original text game

• "Rawitch was a student teacher for" → "for which Rawitch was a student teacher"
• "which schools could connect to" → "to which schools could connect"
• "It was a hit" might fall too close to MOS:IDIOM
• "Rawitsch was hired by the Minnesota Educational Computing Consortium (MECC), a state-funded organization that developed educational software for the classroom, as an entry-level liaison for local community colleges." → "the Minnesota Educational Computing Consortium (MECC), a state-funded organization that developed educational software for the classroom, hired Rawitsch as an entry-level liaison for local community colleges."
• "which schools around Minnesota could connect to" → "to which schools around Minnesota could connect"
• missing space in "adaptedThe"
• The game is referred to as Oregon only once, I'd write out the whole title since this isn't widely used in the article

1985 game

• "from one where" → "from one in which"
• "primarily for schools" → "school settings"
• "educational aspect should be" → "educational aspect should arise from"
• "which resemble the original game"
• "instead flipped dead animals upside down" → "flipped animals upside down to indicate their deaths"
• "retained adding" → "retained the addition of"

Later versions

• "had the game's interface changed" → "had altered the game's interface"

Reception and legacy

• 1985 version is considered the main version Can we rephrase to reduce repetition of "version"?
• "form 1971 on" → "from 1971 on"

References

• Good – the Medium sources are fine as they are published by, you know, the subject matter expert

General comments

• Images are properly licensed and relevant
• No stability concerns in the revision history
• Copyvio score looks good

Putting on hold to allow nominator to address remaining comments. Please feel free to ping me with questions, and let me know when you're finished! — GhostRiver 20:33, 3 February 2022 (UTC)

@GhostRiver: All done! I see that I had some problems with prepositions in this one, especially dangling "to"s. Thanks for catching them! --PresN 01:46, 4 February 2022 (UTC)

Thanks for making those changes, happy to pass! — GhostRiver 18:26, 4 February 2022 (UTC)