Talk:Simulation in manufacturing systems
Latest comment: 8 years ago by Ian (Wiki Ed) in topic Feedback
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editNice work on your article draft. One important thing to remember is that Wikipedia articles are supposed to have lead sections, not introductions. The lead should start with a statement of what the topic is
Simulation in manufacturing systems is [...] (or maybe, is used for [...])
Then the rest of the lead needs to summarize all the major points of the article.
One other thing - the Objectives section would be much more readable with fewer bullet points. Minimal use should be made of bullet points - in cases like this, they reduce readability. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 17:42, 12 May 2016 (UTC)