Talk:Siege of Wardour Castle/GA1

Latest comment: 4 years ago by Amitchell125 in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Amitchell125 (talk · contribs) 15:49, 31 March 2020 (UTC)Reply


Happy to do the review for this article.

Assessment

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Lead section

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Linked, and expanded to King Charles
  • Link mines;
Linked. Harrias talk 09:35, 4 April 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • the New Wardour Castle - consider removing the.
Changed as suggested. Harrias talk 09:35, 4 April 2020 (UTC)Reply

Background

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Both done. Harrias talk 09:35, 4 April 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • Who was John Aubrey?
Added. Harrias talk 09:35, 4 April 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • Royal favour - the capital is not necessary here
Bad habit, fixed. Harrias talk 09:35, 4 April 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • "for his catholic zeal" and "stiff papist" - these look like quotations, and if so in each case the person who said it needs to be named, or the quote not used.
Attributed. Harrias talk 09:35, 4 April 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • Should not parliament be capitalised?
Another bad habit. Harrias talk 09:35, 4 April 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • multiple occasions,… - the number needs to be more specific, as 'multiple' is too vague.
Removed this completely. Harrias talk 09:01, 11 April 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • The castle was subsequently confiscated… - by whom? Please clarify.
  • Wardour Castle is located… - this sentence lacks a citation. Also, the following sentence does not appear to have the right citation, as Stanton does not refer to the 5th Baron Lovel. (However, Wright does refer to Lovell, perhaps this is the correct source.)
Sorted these references. Harrias talk 09:01, 11 April 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • Please amend the text so that Matthew reads 'Sir Matthew', and the windows were not enlarged, but constructed (according to Wright).
Not for the only time in this article, my sources seem to have got mixed up here, I'll come back to these three. Harrias talk 09:35, 4 April 2020 (UTC)Reply
Changed to Sir Matthew. There is ambiguity in the sources about whether windows were enlarged or constructed (I suspect that actually both were done, so I removed the reference to windows completely. Harrias talk 09:01, 11 April 2020 (UTC)Reply

First siege

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  • ...out of Somerset… - link Somerset
Linked. Harrias talk 09:35, 4 April 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • Lady Arundell's grandchildren were held until July 1644, when they were released… - Wright gives a different date.
I'll look into this, I'm sure it was July, but Wright does indeed give May as the date. Harrias talk 09:35, 4 April 2020 (UTC)Reply
I've changed this to May. Harrias talk 08:22, 11 April 2020 (UTC)Reply

Second siege

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  • ...the historian H. F. Chettle suggests… - replaced suggests with 'suggested'.
Changed. Harrias talk 09:35, 4 April 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • ...which would place the second siege as starting in late May. - this is not stated by Ludlow and should be left to the reader to surmise (see WP:EDITORIALIZING).
Trimed. Harrias talk 09:35, 4 April 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • Although there was no formal blockade of the castle, the country around it was controlled by the Royalists. - could a specific page in Ludlow be provided for this sentence?
It's a summary of the whole range of pages. Harrias talk 09:35, 4 April 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • Ludlow recalls … - consider replacing with 'Ludlow recalled in his memoir…'
Tweaked. Harrias talk 09:35, 4 April 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • ..after three months they were prepared to blow the walls. - from how I read French the miners 'were eventually successful', i.e. it took them three months of attempts before they succeded. The text should I think be amended accordingly.
  • ...and a few days later the first mine was exploded. - I can't find this in Ludlow on p. 34.
In Ludlow, p. 34, he says "the two nights following we all continued upon the guard; and upon the thursday morning ... so that the mine springing". Harrias talk 08:21, 11 April 2020 (UTC)Reply

Bibliography

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Linked. Harrias talk 09:35, 4 April 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • Consider linking Edgar to this (available with a free registration).
Linked. Harrias talk 09:35, 4 April 2020 (UTC)Reply

Looking good

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Harrias, it's looking largely sorted, thanks for the work you've done so far. Amitchell125 (talk) 18:18, 6 April 2020 (UTC)Reply

@Harrias: - Hello, as the article has been on hold for over a week, can you complete the last remaining issues? Please let me know if there is a problem and you need more time, as it would seem a shame to fail the article now that you've done much of the work required. Amitchell125 (talk) 20:00, 10 April 2020 (UTC)Reply

Sorry, this completely slipped my mind. I'm unlikely to have much time until Monday now, but I'll see what I can do in the mean time. Harrias talk 19:20, 10 April 2020 (UTC)Reply

@Amitchell125: Okay, had some unexpected quiet time this morning, so I've tried to work through the remaining points, let me know what you think now. Harrias talk 09:02, 11 April 2020 (UTC)Reply

Passing

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Great article - thanks for all your work, passing now. Amitchell125 (talk) 21:46, 11 April 2020 (UTC)Reply