Talk:Siege of Smolensk (1632–1633)

GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:Siege of Smolensk (1632–1633)/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: GreatOrangePumpkin (talk · contribs) 16:21, 21 June 2012 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

   Should "king" be capitalicized? Sounds like a proper noun to me.

   Standardized to non-capitalized version. --_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here} 18:25, 21 June 2012 (UTC)

   "ending the last Russo-Polish War.[1]" - not sure if I understand correctly, but there were many more Russia-Polish wars. Maybe remove "last" to avoid this confusion or replace with "latest"

   Good point, fixed. --_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here} 18:25, 21 June 2012 (UTC)

   "comprised part of Shein's army.[4]" - I would add "a" behind "comprised" for flow

   Good point, fixed. --_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here} 18:25, 21 June 2012 (UTC)

   "force of about 1,500 strong" - not sure if the "strong" is correct; is this standard in war-related articles?

   I am not sure myself, I thought I saw it used in some other articles; if you would like to change it, go ahead. --_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here} 18:25, 21 June 2012 (UTC)

   delink "pospolite ruszenie" in the second mention

   "Cossack" should be linked here and the one in the second paragraph of the second section should be delinked

   Done. --_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here} 18:25, 21 June 2012 (UTC)

   Can you integrate "Shein's begun the siege of Smolensk on 28 October.[6]" into the next section?

   Done. --_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here} 18:25, 21 June 2012 (UTC)

   Should "siege" be capitalicized?

   I think it can, some articles do it for the Battle of, and it is the same with Siege of. But I just checked and I don't see much capitalization of this word in the article? --_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here} 18:25, 21 June 2012 (UTC)

   Why the bracket "Tymosz (Timofiy) Orendarenko"?

   Changed to Ukrainian spelling. --_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here} 18:25, 21 June 2012 (UTC)

   This and the other sections are ok

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

   Non-English sources should be labelled as such

   Done. --_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here} 18:25, 21 June 2012 (UTC)

   Wrong formatting of Ref 7

   ISBN error fixed. --_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here} 18:25, 21 June 2012 (UTC)

   Several sources should be labelled as "pp" instead of "p"

   Fixed. --_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here} 18:25, 21 June 2012 (UTC)

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall: Great article, just needs a few fixes before passing. --GoP_T^C_N 16:52, 21 June 2012 (UTC)

   Pass/Fail:

   Thanks, I addressed the raised issues. Is there anything I missed? --_{Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus| reply here} 18:25, 21 June 2012 (UTC)

   Thanks for the corrections. I just ignore this "strong" for now :) Overall very interesting, good work! :)--GoP_T^C_N 18:31, 21 June 2012 (UTC)