Talk:Shattered Glass (Britney Spears song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Adabow (talk · contribs) 04:11, 9 March 2011 (UTC)

• Dablinks - one found and fixed
• ELs are clean

Lead

• Add "Unusual You" as the A-side in infobox

 Not done I think that only works for the singles template. I tried putting it in, but nothing showed up. I might be doing it wrong. --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:01, 9 March 2011 (UTC)

Strange, I thought it had the parameter. Take a look at my proposal if ya want to. :D

Great idea! Hope they change it, since there are a lot of charted B-Sides out there. --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:34, 10 March 2011 (UTC)

• Release date in infobox should be September 15, 2009

 Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:01, 9 March 2011 (UTC)

• In the second sentence you should use the stage names for Dr. Luke and Benny Blanco so that readers do not think their were five people involved, instead of three

 Done Changed to Lukasz "Dr. Luke" Gottwald and same for Blanco. --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:01, 9 March 2011 (UTC)

• Link teen-pop, dance and disco

 Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:01, 9 March 2011 (UTC)

• Link Auto-Tune

 Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:01, 9 March 2011 (UTC)

• Link B-side

 Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:01, 9 March 2011 (UTC)

• Link Unusual You

 Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:01, 9 March 2011 (UTC)

• Link component charts to Billboard charts

 Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:01, 9 March 2011 (UTC)

• Link the different charts

Background and composition

• Reduce File:05 Shattered Glass.ogg to about 65kbps and less than 17.2 seconds

 Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:24, 9 March 2011 (UTC)

Per WP:SAMPLE it still needs to be trimmed to less than 10% (17.2 seconds). Adabow (talk · contribs) 06:51, 10 March 2011 (UTC)

AGH Can't believe I forgot that in the first place. Used a completely different portion of the song to match the new time frame.  Fixed --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:33, 10 March 2011 (UTC)

• The caption is a mess - rewrite it

 Fixed --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:24, 9 March 2011 (UTC)

• Link pop

 Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:24, 9 March 2011 (UTC)

• Link guitar

 Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:24, 9 March 2011 (UTC)

• Link rift

 Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:24, 9 March 2011 (UTC)

• What is a "jagged" verse?

Well, since I'm pretty sure they were speaking of her vocals, I changed it to "jagged and distorted vocals in the chorus" --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:24, 9 March 2011 (UTC)

• Auto-Tuned in lead, auto-tuned here - be consistent

 Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:24, 9 March 2011 (UTC)

• "though it has been noted" - by who?

 Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:24, 9 March 2011 (UTC)

• "The song takes influences from teen pop..." - takes influences?

 Fixed Change to "contains elements of" --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:24, 9 March 2011 (UTC)

• The sentence about lyrics is exactly the same as in the lead

 Fixed Less detailed in sentence in the lead. --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:24, 9 March 2011 (UTC)

You now have "the song is very emotional" in the lead, which is not said later, and sounds to be the opposite of what the song is. Adabow (talk · contribs) 07:00, 10 March 2011 (UTC)

 Fixed "Lyrically, the song has varying emotions in its lyrics, speaking of flirting, betrayal, and a sense of entrapment as well as self loathing in her relationship with fame." --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:24, 10 March 2011 (UTC)

Reception

• Repeating the quote in the image caption is a bit POV

 Fixed

• You need to identify writers here, as newspapers don't form opinions; their writers do

 Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:56, 9 March 2011 (UTC)

• said the song and 'Womanizer' "use their pulsing..." - Womanizer should have double quote marks ("), and reword so that you don't have two quote marks next to each other

 Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:56, 9 March 2011 (UTC)

• The Daily News ref should be next to its quote

 Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:56, 9 March 2011 (UTC)

• Link Billboard charts

 Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:56, 9 March 2011 (UTC)

No, it isn't. Adabow (talk · contribs) 07:06, 10 March 2011 (UTC)

• How do you know that it is digital downloads? Maybe include a bit about the Digital Songs charting here

Because it has to be. There is no sign of any other kind of release her except for digital download on the album. --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:56, 9 March 2011 (UTC)

OK, but I maintain that the Digital Songs info would be better up here. See...errm...Bigger (Justin Bieber song) for an example. Adabow (talk · contribs) 07:06, 10 March 2011 (UTC)

Billboard has failed to show that Shattered Glass charted on its official website, so we can't compare it to other songs from Circus. Anyway, it says nearly the same thing. --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:21, 10 March 2011 (UTC)

• Link Billboard Hot 100

 Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:56, 9 March 2011 (UTC)

• " remaining on the chart for that week" - remove

 Fixed Changed it. Now say "before dropping off and reappearing for the week of..." --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:56, 9 March 2011 (UTC)

• "and then reappearing the week after next" - a date would be better

 Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:56, 9 March 2011 (UTC)

• The Billboard ref does not support the statement

If you are speaking of the weeks it charted, you will need to look at the visualizer using the arrow on the left

It confirms that it was on the "iLike" chart for 2 weeks, but nothing about Hot 100. Adabow (talk · contribs) 07:25, 10 March 2011 (UTC)

lol I'm blind.  Fixed Used allmusic and aCharts instead. Also removed that it was there for two weeks, since I guess it isn't true. --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:17, 10 March 2011 (UTC)

• "was also able to chart" → charted

 Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:56, 9 March 2011 (UTC)

• pop chart → Pop Songs

 Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:56, 9 March 2011 (UTC)

• digital songs → Hot Digital Songs

 Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:56, 9 March 2011 (UTC)

• Link Canadian Hot 100

 Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:56, 9 March 2011 (UTC)

• "and thirty-six" → and number thirty-six

 Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:56, 9 March 2011 (UTC)

• Canadian digital songs chart → Hot Canadian Digital Singles

 Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:56, 9 March 2011 (UTC)

Track listing

• What happened to New Zealand?

 Done

• Link Unusual You

 Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 23:14, 9 March 2011 (UTC)

Credits and personnel

• Link names

 Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 23:13, 9 March 2011 (UTC)

• Link vocals to singing (for Spears)

 Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 23:13, 9 March 2011 (UTC)

Charts

• Why not use the Billboard page for refs?

Because Billboard fails to properly archive most songs that are not singles that chart. --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 23:11, 9 March 2011 (UTC)

References

• The dates are incorrectly formatted here. Either YYYY-MM-DD or Month Day, Year

 Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 23:10, 9 March 2011 (UTC)

MM and DD mean put a '0' in front of single-digit month/day numbers. Adabow (talk · contribs) 07:19, 10 March 2011 (UTC)

Sorry, I've always done it a different way, so.  Fixed --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:12, 10 March 2011 (UTC)

• Popmatters → PopMatters

 Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 23:10, 9 March 2011 (UTC)

• Discogs is not reliable

 Removed --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 23:10, 9 March 2011 (UTC)

• ABC News is not in print; unitalicise

It's not italicized as far as I can see when looking at it in the "work" section of the cite. --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 23:10, 9 March 2011 (UTC)

• Acharts is unreliable

 Not done Per WP:GOODCHARTS when there is no other way to substitute an unlicensed chart, it may be used. --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 23:10, 9 March 2011 (UTC)

What about [1]? Adabow (talk · contribs) 07:11, 10 March 2011 (UTC)

Oh, I didn't even think about it being in the Biggest Jumps/Falls sections.  Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:06, 10 March 2011 (UTC)

Now that you have alternative sources, please remove the acharts ref. - last thing to do, and then I'll pass. Adabow (talk · contribs) 22:38, 10 March 2011 (UTC)

 Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 00:49, 11 March 2011 (UTC)

• Please add publishers to refs (if applicable)

Since many of the "works" over lap with "publishers" they are listed as "publisher" --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 23:10, 9 March 2011 (UTC)

I can see Billboard and About.com which need publishers added. Adabow (talk · contribs) 07:19, 10 March 2011 (UTC)

Oh, sorry.  Fixed --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 22:06, 10 March 2011 (UTC)

• Remove the main Britney navbox

 Done --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 23:10, 9 March 2011 (UTC)

Summary

• Not too good a start, some work to do. I'll put the review on hold for seven days. Adabow (talk · contribs) 04:11, 9 March 2011 (UTC)

• Also, the release notes for Unusual You will not contain the release date. Adabow (talk · contribs) 07:21, 10 March 2011 (UTC)

Fixed. For some reason, the Hung Medien site was removed. --ĈÞЯİŒ 1ооо 21:48, 10 March 2011 (UTC)