Talk:Say Less (Ashanti song)/GA1

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Reviewer: Freikorp (talk · contribs) 10:41, 11 June 2018 (UTC)

• Should you clarify that in the lead that Ashanti's sixth album has yet to be released?

• Clarified. Aoba47 (talk) 17:57, 11 June 2018 (UTC)

• "'Say Less' is the lead single from Ashanti's upcoming sixth album" - can you give any indication of when the album is expected to drop?

• Unfortunately, I do not believe there is any indication on when this album will be released. I will of course update this article when further information comes out. Aoba47 (talk) 17:57, 11 June 2018 (UTC)

• "When "Say Less" was chosen for use in an advertisement for Cîroc vodka, she decided to make it a single" - I'd reword the order of this sentence, I.e "She decided to make it a single after it was chosen ...", but up to you

• Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 17:57, 11 June 2018 (UTC)

• "Young n---a got the pool with me" - Wikipedia is not censored.

• I received this note when I changed it (I get why you did this, because Wikipedia isn't censored, but on the other hand, we can't state something the source does not. WP:NOTCENSORED doesn't apply if the source censors itself, even if we think we know or we're sure what is meant). Aoba47 (talk) 17:57, 11 June 2018 (UTC)

• I'd introduce Wendy Williams to the reader with a title. How about television host? Is it clear from the music video that Ashanti is watching her on The Wendy Williams Show? If so I'd instead just clarify that to the reader.

• Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 17:57, 11 June 2018 (UTC)

• Do any of the secondary sources comment on the fact that Cîroc vodka appears in the music video? I'd mention that if they do; it's interesting.

• Unfortunately, I do not believe there is a source for that. Aoba47 (talk) 17:57, 11 June 2018 (UTC)

• "Reports about Ashanti pushing a fan into a pool" - since the video pretty much opens with this, do you think it should be introduced at the beginning of the music video section?

• Revised. Aoba47 (talk) 17:57, 11 June 2018 (UTC)

Great work. Placing on hold. Freikorp (talk) 10:41, 11 June 2018 (UTC)

• Thank you for the review! I believe that I have addressed everything. Aoba47 (talk) 17:57, 11 June 2018 (UTC)

• Hi Aoba47. I'm happy to pass this, but I'm not convinced that word should be censored. It's a secondary source commenting on it (as opposed to self-censorship from the content creator), and obviously the only reason they are choosing to censor it is because it's not a social acceptable word to print in media; they'd probably lose advertising revenue if people complained about it. Every time I've seen a secondary source censor a curse word, such as 'f**k', that word will become uncensored when used on Wikipedia. And it's clear from listening to the song what the word in question is. I'm not going to hold up passing this nomination over such a small issue, I just thought I'd mention it. Congratulations on another great article. :) Freikorp (talk) 22:38, 11 June 2018 (UTC)