Talk:Sawfly/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Dunkleosteus77 (talk · contribs) 05:54, 31 December 2016 (UTC)

Comments by Dunkleosteus77

When all the comments are resolved, that should be about it   User:Dunkleosteus77 |push to talk  23:50, 31 December 2016 (UTC)

No worries, thanks for taking this on. Burklemore1 (talk) 02:50, 1 January 2017 (UTC)

Many thanks both of you, I missed the action here for some reason, not quite sure what happened. Chiswick Chap (talk) 07:53, 7 January 2017 (UTC)

Grammar and syntax

• First and foremost, I don't think the notes are all too necessary since they just define abbreviations. It'd be simpler just to wikilink "†" to Dagger (typography)#Modern usage and "spp." to species on first mention

Yeah, I believe a user who expanded the taxonomy section added these in, not sure why. I have removed all notes, but I have added "Extinct taxa are indicated by a †." just above the superfamilies and families list for clarification.

• In the lead, change, "...within the order Hymenoptera (ants, bees, wasps and sawflies)," to something along the lines of, "...within the order Hymenoptera alongside ants, bees and wasps." (Optional)

Your suggestion makes sense, the current sentence does seem redundant (we don't need to say it is in the order again).

• wikilink "superfamily" in the lead

Linked.

• In the lead, change, "...has existed from that time to this," to, "...has (existed/persisted/continued) into the present"

Done.

• In the Etymology section, change, "The suborder name Symphyta derives from..." to, "The suborder name ''Symphyta'' derives from..."

Done.

• In the Etymology section, change, "Sawflies are also known as wood-wasps," to, "Sawflies are also known as ''wood-wasps'' " (optional)

Done.

• Are Hymenoptera aculeata, Hymenoptera apocrita, and Hymenoptera phytophaga binomial names, because they're not italicized on first mention and they are on second mention?

I read the source and it shows these names were italicised, so I would assume so.

• In the Phylogeny section, wikilink "venation" to Insect wing#Venation

Linked.

• In the Phylogeny section, change, "...date back to the Middle or Late Triassic," to, "... date back to the Middle or Late Triassic," and do the same for Middle Jurassic and Cretaceous

Linked

• In the Phylogeny section, change, "these statements indicate a humid and warm climate," to, "this indicates a humid and warm climate," or, "these are indicative of a humid and warm climate"

Done.

• Instead of putting "The cladogram is based on Schulmeister 2003" above the cladogram, put it in the caption
• In the Taxonomy section, change, "...are indicated by a |†," to, "...are indicated by a dagger (†)" (optional)

Done.

• In the Taxonomy section, wikilink Alexandr Rasnitsyn

Done.

• In the Description section where it talks about the differences between them and caterpillars, since it starts out with, "...can distinguish the two:", you have to separate the reasons with either commas or semicolons. Alternatively, you could just replace the colon with a period and merge that sentence with the one before it where it starts out with, "The larvae of sawflies are easily mistaken..."
• wikilink currawong, honeyeater, and fantail

Done.

• In the Behaviour and ecology section, "Sawfly and moth larvae formed one third..."

Done.

• Change the caption of the picture of the larva in the rose in the Behaviour and ecology section to something like, "Rose stem sawfly (Hartigia trimaculata) larva in a rose stem"

Done.

• In the cladogram in the Taxonomy section, why is "Apocrita" in all caps?

Perhaps Chiswick Chap has the answer to this question!

• duplinks
  • Apocrita (twice in the Phylogeny section)

Done.

• • Tenthredinoidea (once in the Taxonomy section)

Done.

• • Mesozoic (once in the Description section)

Done.

• • Tenthredinidae (once in the Distribution section)

Done.

• • Xyelidae (once in the Distribution section)

Done.

• • Orussidae (once in the Distribution section)

Done.

• • Batesian mimicry (once in the Behaviour and ecology section)

Done.

• • Parasitoids (once in the Parasites section)

Done.

• • Diprionidae (once in the Relationship with humans section)

Done.

• In the Parasites section, change, "more than 40 species known to attack them," to, "more than 40 species are known to attack them"

Done.

• In the Parasites section, "possibly collect and expert their natural enemies"

Done.

• In the Life cycle and reproduction section, change, "...with some emerging in just a couple months, to others in 1 – 2 years," to, "...with some emerging in just a couple months, and others in 1 – 2 years," or, "...emerging anywhere between a couple months to 2 years"

Done I think.

• In the Life cycle and reproduction section, remove, "As previously mentioned"

Done.

• In the Life cycle and reproduction section, change, "The larva live in sycamore trees and does not..." to, "The larvae live in sycamore trees and do not..." or, "The larva lives in sycamore trees and does not..."

Done.

• In the Life cycle and reproduction section, change, "Once inside, upper cuticles disc separates and descends..." to, "Once inside, the upper-cuticle's disc separates and descends..." or, "Once inside, the upper-cuticle discs separate and descend..."

Done.

• In the Life cycle and reproduction section, make sure the entire second paragraph is either singular or plural (for example, the entire second paragraph uses either "larva" or "larvae", but not both even in different sentences)

Did some changes.

• In the Relationship with humans section, "Sawflies are important economic pests of forestry..." when you say "important" it implies its beneficial. Try using "major" instead

Done.

• In the Relationship with humans section, change, "...pests of forestry, where species in the Diprionidae such as the pine sawflies, Diprion pini and Neodiprion sertifer cause serious damage..." to, "...pests of forestry. For example, species in the Diprionidae, such as the pine sawflies( (/, ) Diprion pini and Neodiprion sertifer( )/, ) cause serious damage..."

Done.

• In the Relationship with humans section, change, "...the rose sawflies Arge pagana and A. ochropus defoliate..." to, "...the rose sawflies, Arge pagana and A. ochropus, defoliate..."

Done.

• Ovipositor is wikilinked for the first time in the Relationship with humans section, when it should be wikilinked in the Etymology section

Seems ovipositor is already lnked in the etymology section, but I have delinked the one you mentioned.

• Mimicry is wikilinked for the first time in the Relationship with humans section, when it should be wikilinked in the Behaviour and ecology section, or not at all considering its referring to Batesian mimicry specifically which is already wikilinked multiple times

Done.

• In the Relationship with humans section, "...can be sprayed with a number of chemicals, including maldison, dimethoate and carbaryl if removing larvae..." add a comma before "if" since the listing of chemicals is an interrupter

Done.

References

• add the |language=German parameter to ref no. 1

Done.

• ref no. 2 has a free version at http://biotaxa.org/Zootaxa/article/view/zootaxa.3703.1.12/4282

Thanks, added in.

• remove the url for ref no. 14 because it doesn't lead to a full version of the article

Done.

• add the |language=German parameter to ref no. 25

Done.

• for ref no. 46, add the |year=2014

Done.