Talk:Progressive music/Archive 2

Archive 1

Archive 2

Archive 3

Dismabiguation

The page has been changed to a disambiguation page. If anyone wants the original text, it's in the history.

The talk page had not been active since August 2006 and is in the archive link above. --Parzival418 _Hello 02:56, 2 July 2007 (UTC)

GA Review

The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.

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This review is transcluded from Talk:Progressive music/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 22:55, 31 October 2016 (UTC)

Lead

• and sometimes results → with it sometimes resulting
• Electicism, like formalism, → Like formalism, electicism
• toward style synthesis, or integration → remove comma here
• but its listeners failed to move with the musicians → too unencyclopedic; try to reword
• allowing performers limited control over their own content → offering performers limited control over their own material

Jazz

• its "progressive" features → begin sentence with capital letter
• autobiography: "They tried → autobiography; "They tried
• that was made for listening → Remove; I think that's already clear (I mean, we don't eat it, right? )

This is meant to contrast with music created for dancing, which is the antithesis of art music.--Ilovetopaint (talk) 09:27, 2 November 2016 (UTC)

Pop and rock

• dramatically accelerated → dramatically increased
• the "progressive" label arrived → With the arrival of a "progressive" label
• with standard pop music formula → with the standard pop music formula
• "progressive" label: lyrics → "progressive label"—lyrics
• For the rest of this sentence (above), please set a normal comma in place of a ;
• Before the progressive pop of the late 1960s → Prior to the progressive pop of the late 1960s
• Beach Boys' 1966 album → Beach Boys' 1966 studio album
• with their lyrical unity, extended structure, complexity, eclecticism, experimentalism, and influences derived from classical music forms, are largely viewed as beginnings in the progressive rock genre → are largely viewed as beginnings in the progressive rock genre due to their lyrical unity, extended structure, complexity, eclecticism, experimentalism and influences derived from classical music forms.
• Critic Simon Reynolds → [[Music journalism|Music critic]] Simon Reynolds
• beginning in 1967 → beginning with 1967

• (before the year 1969) → you can leave the paranthesis out
• Those proto-prog musicians → The musicians that have approached this genre
• bands ... into → bands [...] into
• continued to support → continued to incorporate

• by the likes of Yes, Genesis, and Emerson, Lake & Palmer → place this at the end of the respective sentence for better flow
• John Covach: "By John Covach, "by
• sound. ... What → sound [...] What
• groups ... was → groups [...]
• rock in that it balanced → rock by balancing
• It also drew generously from → It was also notably influenced
• From the same period → In the same period
• writes: "the → writes; "the

Electronic

• DJ/producer → disc jockey and producer

Notes

• to the academic Tim Wall → "the" is overfluous
• Allan Moore writes: "It → replace : with ;
• song. ... → song. [...]
• In note two there is a redlink, and the speech of the writer isn't quit with a closing "
• From about 1967 → Starting with about 1967
• both musics → both styles of music

References

• There's a red link at reference #33
• No dead links. Good work!

Outcome

• I've put this  On hold for 7 days to allow edits on the article. Very good job! Best regards, Cartoon network freak (talk) 22:55, 1 November 2016 (UTC)
  • Done!--Ilovetopaint (talk) 09:27, 2 November 2016 (UTC)
    • @Ilovetopaint: Gladly passing! Congrats, Cartoon network freak (talk) 12:02, 2 November 2016 (UTC)

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.