Talk:Philip Primrose/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Nikkimaria (talk) 03:34, 1 June 2011 (UTC)

On hold pending copy-editing. Nikkimaria (talk) 04:21, 1 June 2011 (UTC)

Thanks for the review. Will get to this later today sometime. Connormah (talk) 22:22, 1 June 2011 (UTC)

Writing and formatting

• Some unneeded repetition - in the lead we see "Upon his" x 2, repeat of retirement in 1915, "took up" x 2, etc
• Some copy-editing is needed here - for example, what is the "United Kingsdon"?

• An embarrassing typo it is. Connormah (talk) 23:59, 1 June 2011 (UTC)

• The first para of Early life uses "He" repeatedly, and it's not entirely clear where his father stops and Philip begins
• Macleod or Macloed?
• Ellipses should not be set with square brackets
• Need more hyphens - for example, "three-round salute"

Accuracy and verifiability

• Order Bibliography alphabetically?
• Ref 8: legislative assembly is the publisher, not the author
• Ref 12: Alberta Online Encyclopedia could be considered either a work or a publisher, but is definitely not an author
• Why include publisher location for one bibliography entry and not the other two

Broad

Some minor repetition of information

Neutrality

No issues noted

Stability

No issues noted

Images

• Source link for 1914 NWMP image is dead

• Linking to Glenbow Archives files online doesn't always work, I've removed the link. Connormah (talk) 00:02, 2 June 2011 (UTC)