Talk:Peter Hall (RNZAF officer)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk · contribs) 16:06, 19 September 2023 (UTC)

I'll take a look at this shortly. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 16:06, 19 September 2023 (UTC)

Prelim

• Medal bar is duplicated in the lede

• Fixed. Zawed (talk) 09:57, 29 September 2023 (UTC)

• Article is stable
• File:Peter Hall, RNZAF (cropped).jpg needs USPD

• Added. Zawed (talk) 10:13, 29 September 2023 (UTC)

• Earwig reports copyvio unlikey

Lede and infobox

• Main text does not say he died in Cumbria

• Initially removed, then re-added when I found a source for it. Zawed (talk) 10:13, 29 September 2023 (UTC)

• Hall spent about half his service in 140 Sqn, I think it appropriate to add it in the infobox

• Done. Zawed (talk) 10:13, 29 September 2023 (UTC)

Main text

• Clergyman, not clergy man

• Done. Zawed (talk) 10:13, 29 September 2023 (UTC)

• Where was 140 Squadron based?

• My print sources for RAF squadrons only cover the fighter units so I have added a little bit from an online source. It doesn't have much. Zawed (talk) 10:13, 29 September 2023 (UTC)

• Link sorties (and where were they?)

• Linked. Zawed (talk) 10:13, 29 September 2023 (UTC)

• "Hall and his navigator were credited"

• Fixed. Zawed (talk) 10:13, 29 September 2023 (UTC)

• "but also carrying out"

• Fixed. Zawed (talk) 10:13, 29 September 2023 (UTC)

• "His success was accidental" any more details available? How does one accidentally shoot down an aircraft?

• Have added a little more on this. Zawed (talk) 10:13, 29 September 2023 (UTC)

• "award of a Bar" no need to capitalise

• I'm not sure on this. The template for postnominals captalises it and I think I have been pinged on another article for rendering it as lower case. Zawed (talk) 10:13, 29 September 2023 (UTC)

References

• References look good. AGF with print sources.

@Zawed: Hi, that's all I've got. Will await your reply. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 14:53, 27 September 2023 (UTC)

@Pickersgill-Cunliffe: thanks for the review, I have made a number of edits in respond to your feedback and replied above. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 10:13, 29 September 2023 (UTC)

@Zawed: Passing this article as satisfying the GA criteria. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 13:33, 29 September 2023 (UTC)