Talk:Paulo Francis/GA1
Latest comment: 12 years ago by Cerme in topic Copyedit
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Reviewer: Grandiose (talk · contribs) 12:16, 18 December 2011 (UTC)
- I'll be reviewing the article shortly.
- I have one initial point: the lead should provide a more useful summary per WP:LEAD. Examine each section of the career and early life in turn, then think carefully about merging them.
- Grandiose (me, talk, contribs) 12:16, 18 December 2011 (UTC)
- The article needs a thorough copyedit. Sentences that start "And indeed," are unencyclopedic; grammar (and capitalisation) is off throughout:
- refs without spaces after them;
- refs with spaces before them ("success, [18]")
- hyphens where dashes are intended;
- missing words ("Minister of Planning of the Castelo Branco dictatorial government Roberto Campos")
- at least one spaced em-dash("—") when unspaced or an en-dash is intended;
- incorrect sentence formation "Something he expressed in a mix of pro-Americanism and Left radicalism."
- References should use at least partially consistent notation, eg. "p" or "pg" or "page" but not all three (and sometimes without).
- Please renominate when these issues have been addressed - there is no minimum period for good faith nominations. You may find it helpful to place request at teh Guild of Copyeditors (here). Grandiose (me, talk, contribs) 20:36, 21 December 2011 (UTC)
- Many of these concerns are the sane as those at the fairly recent peer review, which should provide further points on which to work before renominating. Grandiose (me, talk, contribs) 20:39, 21 December 2011 (UTC)
Copyedit
editI have done some, but rather awkward translations of some Portuguese sources leave some of the content somewhat obscure. Perhaps a Portuguese-speaking translator might be of help in providing closer renditions? Rumiton (talk) 15:15, 27 June 2012 (UTC)
- I have made a request for further copy editing. I would only add that some of the obscurities you found come, I'm afraid, from Francis's intentional obscurity, which was a trademark for his very particular brand of literary journalism Cerme (talk) 16:46, 30 June 2012 (UTC)