Talk:Nova Scotia/GA1

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Reviewer: Magic♪piano 18:05, 25 May 2011 (UTC)Reply

This article fails, for a number of reasons, principally missing content and insufficient citation. However, assuming you want some constructive feedback on how to improve the article, here's some more detailed feedback.

  • General issues:
    • The article lacks citations for much of its material
    • The article needs copyediting. There are sentence fragments, and inconsistencies in spelling, e.g. "civil war" in 19th century.
    • The article lacks some information I would consider substantive, for example there are no sections on transportation, media (tv/radio/print/online), or cities and towns. I'll point out other specific issues below, but see e.g. South Dakota (a GA) or other featured place articles for additional guidance.
    • Organization: Geography should probably be placed earlier in the article. See other good/featured articles on places for guidance on organization.
  • History: the history section (especially pre-Confederation) is long on military matters and short on other sorts of history. There is, for example, no mention of the 17th and 18th century economic history, and there is no political history. The long-running dispute between la Tour and d'Aulnay is not to be seen here, and neither is the nominal inclusion of NS as part of the Province of Massachusetts Bay in 1691. (I'm not sure if there's a place here for more on the somewhat interesting historical relationship between Massachusetts and Acadia/Nova Scotia.)
    • 17th and 18th century: do we have estimates for when the Mi'kmaq arrived? Were they the first humans to arrive here?
    • 19th century: "lay siege to American vessels"?
    • 19th century: Nova Scotia's economy boomed during the civil war. Fine - what was the underlying activity (what services or goods were provided)?
    • 20th century: no mention of the Halifax explosion (it is mentioned in literature section, but the historical event is clearly significant)
    • Other possibly important items not seen: coal as a resource, Marconi at Glace Bay, Alexander Graham Bell at Baddeck
  • Sports: I would expect mention of hockey teams in the province (not to mention any other pro or semi-pro sports teams, and prominent university/college sports teams)
  • Tourism: link "world's highest tides" is an easter egg
  • Geography
    • Peninsular NS has the Atlantic on only one side -- identify the bodies on the other sides (Bay of Fundy, Northumberland Strait, Cabot Strait), and those surrounding Cape Breton
    • Cape Breton may be an island, but it should be mentioned that it is now joined to the mainland by a causeway
    • Prominent land features are not described (geology)
    • The province's high point is not identified (neither is its low point; this is presumably sea level, but it should be stated)
    • The Bay of Fundy should receive more mention of its distinctive features (cliffs, any distinctive, named, tide-related formations) and the implication of the tides on activity in the bay
    • Cape Breton should receive more mention of its distinctive geographic features
  • Demographics
    • If there were waves of migration in or out of the province in the 19th and 20th centuries, these should be mentioned
  • Economy: what towns (beyond Halifax/Dartmouth) are major retail/commercial centres? (a section on cities and towns would probably address this)
  • See also: this section should be scrubbed of items that are already mentioned in the article

I'm not at all certain this list of issues is complete. However, I hope I have left you a good roadmap for improving the article. Magic♪piano 19:36, 26 May 2011 (UTC)Reply