Talk:Mycena chlorophos/GA1

Latest comment: 12 years ago by J Milburn in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: J Milburn (talk · contribs) 15:56, 10 September 2012 (UTC)Reply

Great lead image- really draws you in. Review to follow. J Milburn (talk) 15:56, 10 September 2012 (UTC)Reply

  • "known in Japan as the night-light mushroom," I'm not so keen on this; I assume it breaks a MoS rule. Compare, for instance, to how Ring or Sailor Moon format their opening line. Further, as this is found in numerous countries other than Japan, including English speaking countries, I'm not really sure why their name is given precedence.
  • "species "Agaricus cyanophos" in" Italics, presumably?
  • "near the same location as the type locality of M. chlorophos, a couple of weeks later." This isn't really clear. Later than what? Also, as you haven't explicitly mentioned a type location yet (only a lectotype declared many decades later) a reference to it may be confusing.
  • "Other luminescent species in this section are M. discobasis and M. marginata." Are these the only other luminescent species in the section?
  • "and it is somewhat sticky, and" and and
  • "The thin gills are free or adnexed to a slight collar encircling the stem." Perhaps a little jargony? Also "processes".
  • "while the mycelium and stems" mycelia?
  • "M. discobasis fruit bodies have paler caps, larger spores measuring 9.9 by 6.7 μm, and lack the short apical appendage found on M. chlorophos cheilocystidia." This needs to be rephrased a little; perhaps splitting it into two sentences would be helpful.
  • "and clamp connections with loops.[2]" What does this mean?
  • There are some stunning (free) images here, if you fancy them- including some showing what it looks like when it's not dark and glowing.
  • I've seen those, but there's some debate whether it's actually M. chlorophanos (note different spelling), a species purportedly found in Australia that does not yet seem to have been validly published. I've asked Casliber to look up an Australian source for me and may add a picture from here when I have more details. Sasata (talk) 16:21, 11 September 2012 (UTC)Reply
  • Sources look fine.

It'd be great to use the stamp image (it's here, if you fancy using Template:External image or something) but I couldn't find any information about the copyright status of Samoan stamps on a quick search (funny, that). Generally a strong article, as ever. J Milburn (talk) 16:30, 10 September 2012 (UTC)Reply

Ok, thanks for the tweaks, I'm happy to promote this now. J Milburn (talk) 18:25, 12 September 2012 (UTC)Reply