Talk:Mufasa/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: Changedforbetter (talk · contribs) 16:35, 8 October 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: BigChrisKenney (talk · contribs) 07:22, 2 January 2025 (UTC)

Hello, @Changedforbetter: I will be reviewing this article as part of the January 2025 Backlog Drive. BigChrisKenney (talk) 07:22, 2 January 2025 (UTC)

Intro

Made an edit you may wish to review.

Role

Good!

Development

Added a link you may wish to review.

Reception

I agree about the excessive citations in the last paragraph. I recommend to stick to at most, the top five that are the most prominent.

Citations reduced.--Changedforbetter (talk) 14:36, 6 January 2025 (UTC)

Cultural impact

Death

Again with excessive citations, refer to previous comment.

Initial Assesment

Overall, I think the article is well written. There are two things that I would like to see changed.

1. The amount of times that Mufasa's death is referenced to Bambi's mother. I feel like it is referenced too many times across the whole article and needs to only be mentioned once in the intro and once in the main article.

2. The amount of the article that deals with Mufasa's death. It seems like 1/3 - 1/2 of the article is in some way refering to his death. While the death scene was impactful in many ways and deserves to be written about, I am certain that it does not need to be mentioned in every single section of the article. There should be a balance between the rest of the content in the article and I would recommend cutting 30-50% of the current material dealing with his passing.

Hope the comments help! I will continue the review when some changes have been made. BigChrisKenney (talk) 08:02, 2 January 2025 (UTC)

Thanks for starting the review. Sorry about the delay in response! Out of the blue, three of my GA nominated articles randomly got reviewed within a few days of each other so I've been working through them in order of nomination. I'll start addressing your comments today. Changedforbetter (talk) 12:07, 6 January 2025 (UTC)