Talk:Mr. Songbird/GA1

Latest comment: 2 years ago by Tkbrett in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: MarioSoulTruthFan (talk · contribs) 19:14, 16 June 2022 (UTC)Reply


Infobox

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  • Fine

Lead

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  • The Kinks Are the Village Green Preservation Society, → year of release in between brackets
  • Done.
  • but removed it from the album's track listing late in the production process. Because the 12-track edition was issued in several European countries, the song's first release was in Sweden and Norway in October 1968. → but removed it from the album's track listing in a last-minute decision. However, the original 12-track edition had already been sent to several European countries. The song's
  • Done.

  Done

Composition and recording

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  • I would remove the image, doesn't add anything vital to the article
  • Fair enough. Removed.
  • Unlink the second instance of Andy Miller
  • Fixed.
  • recording for which began in earnest in March 1968 → recording for the album or song? It mentions both in the previous sentence.
  • Clarified that it's the album.
  • Mellotron → casual readers won't be familiarized with this, a small sentence between commas could go a long way
  • Added a bit on what a Mellotron is.

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Release and reception

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  • The song therefore does → Therefore, the song does
  • Fixed.
  • Because of the last-minute → Despite the last-minute
  • I disagree. It's because the decision was made at the last minute that masters had already been sent away. If he made the decision earlier, they likely could have been halted. I don't think "Despite" would make much sense in that context.
  • featuring both a "blithe melody and toe-tapping arrangement" → as they both feature a "blithe melody and toe-tapping arrangement"
  • He's not talking about both "Wonderboy" and "Mr. Songbird", but just the latter, so I've tweak the wording to clarify that.
  • is comparable the best written → is comparable to the best written
  • Fixed.
  • released 25 January 1973 → released on 25 January 1973
  • Fixed.

  Done

References

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  • Fine
  • Sourcecheck: 4, 7, 12, 16, 20 and 21
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  • Fine

Overall

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  • Personel section with producers, writers, engineers...
  • Personnel sections are required for albums by WP:PERSONNEL, the WP:SONGS doesn't actually required them for song articles. I try to include them where able, as on "I've Just Seen a Face", but with the Kinks I often just don't have any way to verify every musician on the recording. That's the case here, which is why there isn't one.
  • You need to mention the writer and producer on the body of the article.
  • Done.

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