Talk:Moshassuck Valley Railroad

Latest comment: 1 year ago by Premeditated Chaos in topic GA Review

Did you know nomination

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The result was: promoted by SL93 (talk16:14, 13 June 2022 (UTC)Reply

 
Moshassuck Valley Railroad 3 in 1933

Created by Trainsandotherthings (talk). Self-nominated at 16:45, 28 May 2022 (UTC).Reply

  •   New enough and long enough. QPQ present. It's a short and punchy article (that's one short railroad!) and this is probably the best hook possible for it. AGF on the offline source Karr. No textual issues. Minor copyediting of adjective length distance in hook. Sammi Brie (she/her • tc) 02:13, 29 May 2022 (UTC)Reply
    Thanks for the review. Surprisingly enough, there's enough coverage of the subject that I could probably write an article 5 times the current length. It's just a matter of me finding the time to work on it. But right now I've got something thorough enough to go to DYK. It will probably be significantly longer by the time it hits the main page. Trainsandotherthings (talk) 02:16, 29 May 2022 (UTC)Reply

GA Review

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This review is transcluded from Talk:Moshassuck Valley Railroad/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Premeditated Chaos (talk · contribs) 07:05, 1 September 2022 (UTC)Reply

Dibs. ♠PMC(talk) 07:05, 1 September 2022 (UTC)Reply

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  • "W. F. and Frederick Sayles" reads like a couple of dudes' names, but later context makes it clear it's a company. Can you clarify in-text earlier? (maybe "by the W. F. and Frederick Sayles company, founded by Frank and Frederick Sayles"?)
    Will look into this. The text there was added by an IP following a drive-by edit by another editor disputing the company's origin. It's late on the east coast so I will address this tomorrow. Trainsandotherthings (talk) 03:06, 4 September 2022 (UTC)Reply
    Per this source, the brothers were the founders of the railroad. I have rewritten the founding section accordingly. Trainsandotherthings (talk) 16:22, 4 September 2022 (UTC)Reply
  • "Passenger service continued until 1921, when it was discontinued" - could be simplified to "Passenger service was discontinued in 1921."
    I've modified this to "Passenger service continued until 1921, when it was ended following increased competition from streetcars.". Trainsandotherthings (talk) 15:56, 4 September 2022 (UTC)Reply
  • This is me being biased against short subsections but I don't think "Expansion attempt" needs its own sub-subheading. Won't die on the hill if you insist on keeping it but I need to say it :P
    I think the subsection is necessary. Otherwise, the history section is out of chronological order and may confuse the reader. Trainsandotherthings (talk) 16:22, 4 September 2022 (UTC)Reply

Minimal commentary this time around. It's a short one so didn't have too much to gripe about :) Sources are fine, images are either PD-old or user-generated. ♠PMC(talk) 01:58, 4 September 2022 (UTC)Reply

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