Talk:Kawa model/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: Significa liberdade (talk · contribs) 01:51, 11 September 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: Wolverine XI (talk · contribs) 06:31, 22 September 2024 (UTC)

I'll be reviewing this article shortly. Wolverine XI ^{(talk to me)} 06:31, 22 September 2024 (UTC)

Prose

• the model draws upon the metaphor of a river to describe human occupation, which according to OTs refers to individuals' daily activities that make life meaningful.
• and the model uses the metaphor of a river to represent a person's life flow or occupational journey.

Why are you repeating the same information? And if I may ask, which of these describe the concept of the Kawa model more accurately?

• Mind linking river banks, rocks and driftwood in the lead.

• The river represents the dynamic and ever-changing nature of life, while rocks, debris, and other elements in the river symbolize obstacles, challenges, and personal experiences.
• In the model, "water (mizu) represents life flow and health, driftwood (ryuboku) represents personal assets and liabilities, rocks (iwa) represent life circumstances and problems, and the river walls (torimaki) represent physical and social environmental factors."

Again, you are repeating the same information. Wouldn't it be better for you to just combine the two?

• Link occupational therapy at first occurrence.

• These may include cultural norms, social expectations, family, and environmental conditions. These factors can support or hinder the person's occupational journey. Please don't start two consecutive sentences with "these".

• However, in the best circumstances, => However, in the most ideal circumstances

• It should flow down the river, but it may become stuck on a rock and become an impediment; however, it may also unearth rocks to make them less challenging. What do you mean it "should"?

• When utilizing the Kawa model, OTs often begin by requesting their clients create a visual representation of their life using the river metaphor.[2][4] During and after the client's creation, the OT will ask "open-ended, clarifying questions, using a collaborative approach to ensure that the model provides an accurate representation of the client’s perceptions of his or her life."[2]: 17  The discussion should allow the OT and client "to explore life’s problems, to discuss support systems, and to brainstorm effective methods of problem resolution."[4]: 2  Importantly, the Kawa model is meant to be used as a flexible guide,[8] meaning "it can be used differently with each client, centering on the client’s perspective and narrative rather than a specific procedural agenda." In this paragraph, you heavily rely on quotes, which I don't quite understand. Please rephrase the quoted information in your own words.

• In one study, Lape et al. used the Kawa model within a collaborative care team to facilitate communication about a patient's care needs. Using the model, the care team developed a "holistic picture of [the client] that showcased each health care professional’s unique perspective, which was interwoven with the perspectives of the rest of the team."[9]: 3  Participants in the study found that using the model "provided a common language for interprofessional collaboration" and could be effectively used within their profession. And this paragraph too.

• I added a citation needed tag in "Strengths".

• Importantly, clients are also actively involved in goal-setting, which both centers the clients' values and increases their motivation to participate in therapy. This is not neutral.

• Both OTs and clients can find the conceptual framework difficult to understand. I don't see the use of this sentence.

Images

• File:Kawa Model.jpg is properly licensed (CC0, own work)
• Would you be able to add more pictures?

Broadness

• this source (Kawa model on mental health, sports and physical performance: A mini review) may be of interest.
• this source discusses how using the Kawa model could improve teachers' socio-economic health.
• Other than the two items I've listed above, I found no further issues regarding broadness.

Sources

• The source review will take place sometime next week. Wolverine XI ^{(talk to me)} 07:51, 22 September 2024 (UTC)

  I will be failing this article due to the nominator's lack of cooperation. Feel free to re-nominate once the issues are addressed. Wolverine XI ^{(talk to me)} 16:10, 17 October 2024 (UTC)

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.