Talk:Joseph Dodge

Peer Review

You've done an excellent job of expanding the article! Very impressive. You've made solid improvements with all the individual sections, and your structure so far makes it plain you're no newbie to Wikipedia. It's clear you know your stuff and have put a lot into your research.

Here's just a few things to note:

-In the introduction, you misspelled "MacArthur" as "MacArther". A quick fix. This misspelling is repeated again in the "Personality" section.

-Also in the "Personality" section, you might want to consider that having comments in brackets within the quote makes it a bit confusing, and I think the brackets interrupt the flow of the paragraph. Instead, you may want to try removing what you put in parenthesis from the quote and somehow incorporating your own words afterwards. That way the whole section wouldn't be a quote, and you could expand a bit more on the traits listed, if possible to do so. Roseice8 (talk) 01:25, 21 November 2012 (UTC)

Second Peer Review

An impressive amount of progress has been made to this article. Showing individually which countries Dodge had worked in was a good touch.

A thought is that the personality section could be merged with personal life and career since it’s not particularly detailed thus far.

Perhaps it is unnecessary to say that he started as a “simple” messenger boy.

The part on Dodge taking up boxing feels a little choppy, perhaps it can be revised.

The part saying "even when it meant treading on toes here and there” seems somewhat colloquial and the quote following it could use a name attached to it outside of the reference.

The part saying Dodge "proposed a 90% currency reduction, coupled with capital levies on real property to even out the burden of defeat." does not really need to be in quotation marks.

Maybe “liberal oppression” could be reworded to be more neutral.

I hope my suggestions lead to some help! Vanstraiten (talk) 00:53, 22 November 2012 (UTC)