Talk:Jim Hobbins/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Gonzo fan2007 (talk · contribs) 15:47, 13 October 2023 (UTC)

I'll review this one. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 15:47, 13 October 2023 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Comments

• I archived the reference links.
• I'm not sure his exact GPA is relevant.
  • Removed.
• In the infobox, I think games played is enough. Just my opinion tho.
  • The first three lineman I can think of each have it (Jason Kelce, Jason Peters, Jackie Slater), so I think it should stay.
• You need to clarify his replacement contract was also with the Packers. It is assumed, but not clear.
  • Clarified.
• Although some projected him as a mid-to-late round pick who? Scouts? Sportswriters?
  • The source just says that he was "told he was a potential mid-to-late round pick" - I just stated that he went unselected.
• he was at the age of 34 the oldest player on the team --> he was the oldest player on the team at the age of 34
  • Changed.
• they had their first child later that year, "first" implies more than one. If that isn't know, then just say "they had a child later that year".
  • Changed.
• Ref spot check: #2, 5, 8, 12, 20, 21

Looks good, putting on hold. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 19:37, 17 October 2023 (UTC)

• @Gonzo fan2007: Issues addressed. BeanieFan11 (talk) 00:28, 18 October 2023 (UTC)
  • Looks good, passing. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 14:52, 18 October 2023 (UTC)

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