Talk:Inauguration of Chester A. Arthur

GA Review

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Reviewer: Kavyansh.Singh (talk · contribs) 07:15, 6 March 2022 (UTC)
Nominator: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) at 00:53, 6 March 2022 (UTC)

I'll be reviewing this! – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 07:15, 6 March 2022 (UTC)

GA criteria

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Comments

Prose

• was inaugurated the 21st President of the United States. — my reading of MOS:JOBTITLE is that president should not be capitalized.
  • Done
• Chief Justice of the United States Morrison Waite — Is there a way to avoid WP:SOB
  • Slightly reworded to separate
• Arthur was the fourth vice president to ascend to the presidency after their running mate's death — 'running mate' is bit misleading. Better just say 'president'. Also, 'their' should be 'his'.
  • Done
• his Cabinet — lowercase 'c'
  • Done
• by his citizenry — by the citizens
  • Changed to "the public"
• The first President of the United States — Lowercase per MOS:JOBTITLE
  • Done
• as Vice President for a deceased President — same
  • Done and removed "of the United States" as redundant
• with the Wise Resolution — any link for that resolution?
  • Shockingly no! It was named for Henry A. Wise, but it feels a little Easter egg-y to link to that
• Upon Zachary Taylor's 1850 death in office — should be "Upon Zachary Taylor's death in office in 1850".
  • Done
• while the Half-Breeds championed James G. Blaine's — can we make it a bit more neutral?
  • Changed to supported
• If New York's 35 electoral votes had gone to Hancock, he would have won the nomination — Nomination or presidency?
  • Presidency. Changed
• Section heading: Garfield assassination — shouldn't it be "Garfield's assassination"
  • Changed
• avoided traveling to Washington — DC or state?
  • D.C. Changed to "the capital" (see below)
• including Arthur himself — remove 'himself'
  • Removed
• his own assassination — remove 'own'
  • Removed
• Arthur had never wanted the presidency, and he saw the vice presidency as his ultimate goal. — Did Arthur say this?
  • There are no direct quotes from Arthur on the matter (as he didn't give many interviews), but this is stated by both Millard and Cohen, so I added that qualification
• while the stock market, always unreliable, demonstrated a downward trend. — opinion represented as a fact. (Reliability/Unreliability is opinion; accuracy/inaccuracy is fact)
  • Changed to "some state of flux"; I definitely meant a different word there
• I have this on the back of my mind that Garfield's death has something to do with the doctors and Edison (maybe).
  • Alexander Graham Bell, actually; he invented a metal detector that was supposed to find the bullet that the doctors couldn't, but the metal bedsprings in Garfield's bed interfered with his signal. It's hard to summarize all of the medical malpractice without going into too much detail, but I added a sentence.
    • Ah, I definitely Graham Bell, but don't know why did I type Edison. Regardless, looks fine. I know the article is bit heavy on background, but it is fine. For few politics articles, background is more necessary than other articles, like this one and Cross of Gold speech! – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 16:12, 6 March 2022 (UTC)
• Arthur survived his travel — obviously. Do we need to mention?
  • I added that to clarify that he called an in-person special session later, without use of the letter. Tried to rephrase.
• We have both Washington, D. C. and Washington, D.C. (with and without space)
  • Standardized to without space, which is what our article on the topic uses.
• I'll suggest that wherever you have to mention Washington, D.C., but avoid repetition, better state "D.C." than "Washington".
  • Given that Washington did not become a state until eight years after Arthur's inauguration, and that many of the primary and secondary sources covering this period just use "Washington", I don't think that there will be any confusion if "Washington" is used.
• before Chief Justice of the United States Supreme Court Morrison Waite — Suggesting not to repeat 'United States' and even 'Supreme Court'
  • Done.
• who fell to Grover Cleveland in — lost?
  • Changed
• 1884 United States presidential election — I'd remove 'United States'
  • Removed

Images

• You can add a few more images, like Garfield's or those 2 justice's portraits. If you like, I have also just uploaded File:Coverage of the death of James A. Garfield in 'Harrisburg Telegraph'.jpg, specifically with the letter the cabinet write Arthur. – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 10:38, 6 March 2022 (UTC)
  • Added the image you suggested, a political cartoon of Guiteau, and a contemporary photo of the Lexington Avenue house.
    • Looks good! – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 16:12, 6 March 2022 (UTC)

References

• Ref#81: Stathis 1979, p. 211. Harv error: link from CITEREFStathis1979 doesn't point to any citation. Harv error: this link doesn't point to any citation.
  • Stathis, Schlup, it gets confusing. Fixed!
• Rest all good!

– Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 10:40, 6 March 2022 (UTC)

Kavyansh.Singh I was going to give this a once-over in the morning to see if I made any silly errors, but looks like you beat me to it! Everything should be addressed, thank you for your prompt review. — GhostRiver 15:49, 6 March 2022 (UTC)

All my concerns are addressed, happy to promote. And please do let me know if you have any other article you want me to review! – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 16:12, 6 March 2022 (UTC)