Talk:Hurricane Josephine (1984)

Some light housekeeping

Added wikilinks where required in the first couple sections, and fixed a few grammar problems. You may want to consider removing the line about max intensity not being reached because min pressure wasn't reached. That's going to confuse people, and may not be fully correct anyway. Added a what template to that line for that reason. Also upgraded the class to C as it clearly fits C class criteria (maybe even B). Thegreatdr (talk) 19:57, 2 August 2011 (UTC)

Eek, I totally missed that confusing part. Yea, I removed that. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 21:58, 2 August 2011 (UTC)

GA Review

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Reviewer: Juliancolton (talk) 01:13, 20 August 2011 (UTC)

The article looks solid at first glance. I'll read through it and post any comments or suggestions I have as I go along.

• Hurricane Josephine was the only named storm in the Atlantic basin during October 1984. - Ehh, this seems like non-info to be honest (ie. I'm not sure if it's meant to be a record, a statistic, or just a general comment; in any case, it doesn't really leave me with a sense of the storm).
  • Changed. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 02:45, 20 August 2011 (UTC)
• The fifteenth tropical cyclone, tenth named storm, and the third hurricane - Why "the" before "third" but not "tenth"?
  • Dunno, I didn't write it :P (changed) --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 02:45, 20 August 2011 (UTC)
• before becoming nearly stationary offshore of the East Coast of the United States. - Do you really have to go through the whole ECOTUS spiel again?
  • Sorry. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 02:45, 20 August 2011 (UTC)
• Similar rough seas were reported - ?
  • I usually don't check out the lede when I finish articles. Fool me once... --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 02:45, 20 August 2011 (UTC)
• The origins of Hurricane Josephine were from - "origins were from" is really unusual wording.
  • I completely rewrote the origins. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 02:45, 20 August 2011 (UTC)
• The frontal trough with spawned the area of disturbed weather moved off the southeastern United States on September 30 - Borked sentence structure, and frontal trough is non-standard wording... you could probably just say frontal system (or trough).
  • See above. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 02:45, 20 August 2011 (UTC)
• By October 4, the front became nearly stationary while extending north-northeast of Hispaniola. - "extending north-northeast of Hispaniola"? This doesn't give any specific location (or whether it extends from that point or to that point).
  • See above. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 02:45, 20 August 2011 (UTC)
• When did the surface low form?
  • Not sure, the NHC didn't say. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 02:45, 20 August 2011 (UTC)
• "diffuse"? Weird wording.
  • Ehh, it's redundant. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 02:45, 20 August 2011 (UTC)
• while well offshore of the Bahamas. - I don't think it can really be offshore an island chain...
  • True. Changed to a direction. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 02:45, 20 August 2011 (UTC)
• high tides along the East Coast of the United States. - Again
  • Sorry. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 02:45, 20 August 2011 (UTC)

The prose overall is a little rough, but generally just passes the threshhold for GA. The points above are things I think really need to be looked at, but if and when you get around to fixing them, I'll be glad to pass the article. Juliancolton (talk) 01:13, 20 August 2011 (UTC)

Yea, I got your recommendations. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 02:45, 20 August 2011 (UTC)

Looks good, I'll be passing it! Juliancolton (talk) 15:18, 20 August 2011 (UTC)