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This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 1 March 2021 and 28 March 2021. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Kgnwa. Peer reviewers: Llamabread.

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Medical Student WikiProject

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Greetings fellow Wikipedians, I am a 4th year medical student who's doing a wikiproject in which I've committed to contributing to this fascinating topic. I look forward to working on this with you all and am also excited for the great feedback and suggestions that awaits from you all. My work plan is as follows:

General Plan: To flesh this article out, limiting medical jargon, making it palatable and practicable for the general public

Specifics

Lead: Better explain what a hip dislocation is, using less medical jargon, adding more relevant points

Signs and Symptoms: Flesh out

Cause: Flesh out; Add hip dysplasia here, moving from classification

Mechanism: That “hip extension portion” needs clarity. Each type of dislocation has a different mechanism so will elaborate on this as well

Diagnosis: Citation needed

Classification: Add Steward and Milford Classification for posterior; for anterior, link in Epstein classification system. Might want to get hip dysplasia out of classification given its a risk factor vs. a complication

Management: Uncomplicated portion [citation needed]

*Complications*: Will consider adding complication section

Rehabilitation: Some complications were mentioned but will consider separating

Epidemiology: Flesh out

Thank you, and I look forward to contributing with everyone! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Kgnwa (talkcontribs) 03:24, 11 March 2021 (UTC)Reply

Top Section

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I would like it if the introductory section actual briefly/broadly explained what the term means. As a user, if I clicked on this title and read the first paragraph, I would still be asking "but what is it?" so if it could say even something as simple as "dislocation of the hip is when the juncture where the femur and hip bone meet is spaced to a degree that the femur bone no longer rotates within the hip bone" <--- only an example, not a suggestion of wording or concept. Jillian was here. Say It. 02:19, 13 May 2011 (UTC)Reply

"Congenital" paragraph

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This needs some context. Are these figures global, European or as I suspect North American? Do they refer to annual occurences? The information is a tad complicated and might benefit from a table presentation. I concur with the above poster. The opening para needs to explain what a dislocated hip is. I'll do it myself if no-one else has time (or interest) Richard Avery (talk) 07:43, 7 August 2011 (UTC)Reply

4 years later... to what region do these figures relate? It's ok if it's only North America, but it's no use without context. 86.156.159.255 (talk) 01:08, 2 October 2015 (UTC)Reply

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Hi Kgnwa - overall was really impressed by the additions you've made to the Hip Dislocation article here. Specific thoughts and general comments below:

Specifics thoughts

Lead: Better explain what a hip dislocation is, using less medical jargon, adding more relevant points

- I think this has been the biggest area of improvement for the article. The amount of jargon is significantly reduced and it is much more understandable.

Signs and Symptoms: Flesh out

Cause: Flesh out; Add hip dysplasia here, moving from classification

- Appreciated the specific call outs to causes of the different types of hip dislocation mentioned in the classification section.

Mechanism: That “hip extension portion” needs clarity. Each type of dislocation has a different mechanism so will elaborate on this as well

- Greatly improved clarity in this section and appreciated the links to the more specialized pages on each part of the anatomy.

Classification: Add Steward and Milford Classification for posterior; for anterior, link in Epstein classification system. Might want to get hip dysplasia out of classification given its a risk factor vs. a complication

- Appreciated the new headings and links to established classification schemes. One thought would be to make the "Central Dislocation" section not be a major heading that appears in the table of contents, since it seems that it is an outdated term and isn't used anymore?

Management: Uncomplicated portion [citation needed]

- Appreciate the new headings to organize the existing text

Overall comments:

- Significantly improved readability through use of less medical jargon, especially in the lead section.

- Improved overall structure, more clear where specific information is to be found within the article.

- Overall seems it will be easier for the general reader to find and understand basic information about hip dislocations

- Looking forward to any additional additions you are hoping to make!

Llamabread (talk) 19:52, 22 March 2021 (UTC)Reply