Talk:Health issues in American football/GA1
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Reviewer: Wizardman (talk · contribs) 18:29, 29 June 2014 (UTC)
This has been under review for too long, so I'll give this a shot. It may take me a week or two to do the whole article though since my Wiktime is limited. Wizardman 18:29, 29 June 2014 (UTC)
Here are some issues I found to start off, just through the high school injury section so far:
- Ref 33 redirects to a main page, so a new url will be needed (orthocenter md)
- Ref 27 needs a date, and should have an accessdate too (journalist's resource)
- The first paragraph in injuries needs citing.
- "concussions, blunt injuries to the chest such as cardiac contusions, pulmonary contusions, broken ribs, abdominal injuries, splenic lacerations and kidney injuries." - we need cites after each quote used. I'm sure it's the same as the end of the paragraph, but it'll still have to be put there as well.
- Understood, fixed. Toa Nidhiki05 19:07, 13 July 2014 (UTC)
Will try to knock out the other half of the article tomorrow, if not it'll probably end up being next weekend. Wizardman 03:08, 6 July 2014 (UTC)
- Take your time, I won't be available to edit for the next 5-6 days. Toa Nidhiki05 03:31, 6 July 2014 (UTC)
I read through the article a couple more times and, rather than add nitpicks, I just copyedited and made any small changes myself given that you had to wait six months for a review. The article now passes GA status. Wizardman 02:35, 15 July 2014 (UTC)