Talk:George Whitney Calhoun

Cleanup

Agreed that this page needs some cleanup. I've taken a first pass at it - thoughts? --Chancemichaels 16:00, 30 July 2007 (UTC)Chancemichaels

Proposal to merge The Dope Sheet with George Whitney Calhoun and Green Bay Packers

The Dope Sheet is a 90 year old publication that only ran for 3 years. Today it is essentially a gameday guide. Hardly notable enough to have its own article, and can be easily covered in the other articles. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 18:27, 20 July 2018 (UTC)

Merge  Done. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 15:11, 22 July 2018 (UTC)

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Off-topic text removed from the article by me; this is not Curly Lambeau. Left here in case its removal breaks any refs. Cheers, Baffle gab1978 05:58, 18 August 2018 (UTC)

Lambeau served as both a player (for ten years) and the head coach, a role he had for thirty years from 1919 to 1949. The prominence of these roles and the early success of the Packers helped enshrine Lambeau in the Pro Football Hall of Fame and led to the Packers naming their current stadium after him. Calhoun never received these same honors, although his contributions were significant.

Repeated text: His Dope Sheet newsletter was essential to keeping fans informed of game results, statistics, and players.

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GA Review

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Reviewer: Kaiser matias (talk · contribs) 18:09, 3 October 2018 (UTC)

Will start reviewing this shortly. Kaiser matias (talk) 18:09, 3 October 2018 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:

Comments:

• Be consistent with dates for websites in the references; either use all numbers (2018-08-03) or spelt-out date (July 27, 2018), but try not to mix them.

• "Calhoun was born in Green Bay, Wisconsin, on September 16, 1890; he was the son of Walter A. Calhoun and Emmeline Whitney Calhoun." This sentence can be simplified: "Calhoun was born in Green Bay Wisconsin on September 16, 1890, the son of Walter A. and Emmeline Whitney Calhoun."

• "The Calhoun family was well known in the area;" Hyphen in well-known, and change the semi-colon to a colon, as it explains why they were well-known. Also, add a "the" before "Green Bay Water Company."

• "Calhoun and his family moved to Buffalo, New York..." Is there any explanation as to why? This isn't vital, just seems like something worth noting if known. And is there any idea what he studied at university?
  • There doesn't seem to be an explanation from the sources I have access to for why he moved. Regarding his studies, I would assume something related to journalism, but there isn't a definitive account of his college exploits. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 17:43, 4 October 2018 (UTC)
• "Calhoun was hired by the Green Bay Review as a telegraph editor..." Any date for when this happened?

• "Calhoun was familiar with Lambeau's sports experience from Green Bay East High School and maintained a friendship with him while Lambeau was at University of Notre Dame to play football." Some slight fixes here: "Calhoun was familiar with Lambeau's sports experience at GReen Bay East High School and maintained a friendship with him while Lambeau was at the University of Notre Dam to play football."

• In note 2: "The league was only called the American Professional Football Association..." Remove "only".

• "Calhoun continued in his role as publicity director until 1947, when he was forced to resign by Lambeau." Is there any reason why Lambeau wanted him to resign? Seems like a sudden change from their friendship earlier.
  • Lambeau feuded with everyone in chagre of the Packers at the time. I think they just had a falling out and he decided to part ways with Calhoun. Other then brief mentions that Lambeau didn't get along with anyone, there is nothing specific that clarifies the disagreement or reason for the retirement/resignation/firing. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 17:43, 4 October 2018 (UTC)
• "Lastly, decades after its last publication, the Packers revived the title The Dope Sheet..." I'd drop the "Lastly," as it implies nothing else will happen regarding Calhoun; start with "Decades," though if there is a year they revived the newsletter that would be a good addition as well.

Overall the article is in great shape, just a few minor details to go over and it should be good to go. Kaiser matias (talk) 17:16, 4 October 2018 (UTC)

• Thanks Kaiser matias, I addressed most of your recommendations. Replied to a few above that I did not address. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk) @ 17:43, 4 October 2018 (UTC)

Looks good enough for me, thanks for doing all that. Kaiser matias (talk) 00:10, 5 October 2018 (UTC)