Talk:From the Bottom of My Broken Heart/GA1

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Reviewer: CallMeNathanTalk2Me 01:33, 7 March 2011 (UTC)Reply

Lead

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  • Remove "the"
  • as the fifth and final single from ...Baby One More Time -> the album. You used the title already a few words ago
  • for selling over 50,000 physical units of the single -> ? Platinum is 1 million
  • setted Spears -> setted?
  • the song on the 42nd Grammy Awards -> at the
The whole thing   Done - Sauloviegas (talk) 04:13, 7 March 2011 (UTC)Reply

Background

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  • Again, try and tie in the sentences so it reads more fluently and flows better. Also, I feel there is more info you can add.

Composition

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  • Good, but try and expand a bit
Hey, I've merged the two sections. They were merged before, I unmerged them because I thought there was enough info to do so. I've been searching for infos about the background and composition of the song since December, and I couldn't find anything else... Sorry... :( - Sauloviegas (talk) 04:13, 7 March 2011 (UTC)Reply

Reception

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  • It didn't peak at 52, it debuted
  Done - Sauloviegas (talk) 04:13, 7 March 2011 (UTC)Reply

Music video

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  • Was directed
  • The video portrays Spears
  • Fix up tense issues
  Done - Sauloviegas (talk) 04:13, 7 March 2011 (UTC)Reply

Live performances

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  • Kitted?
Was wearing. - Sauloviegas (talk) 04:13, 7 March 2011 (UTC)Reply
  • Enormous fans? NPOV
Hand fans. - Sauloviegas (talk) 04:13, 7 March 2011 (UTC)Reply

References

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    1. 2 & 4 are linked twice
  Done - Sauloviegas (talk) 20:22, 11 March 2011 (UTC)Reply
    1. 8 needs linking and publishers
  Done - Sauloviegas (talk) 20:22, 11 March 2011 (UTC)Reply
    1. 9, #10, #11 need linking and publishers etc.
  Done - Sauloviegas (talk) 20:22, 11 March 2011 (UTC)Reply
    1. 11 needs work
  Done - Sauloviegas (talk) 20:22, 11 March 2011 (UTC)Reply
    1. 13 not reliable
Archived from the original. - Sauloviegas (talk) 20:22, 11 March 2011 (UTC)Reply
    1. 14 needs work
  Done - Sauloviegas (talk) 20:22, 11 March 2011 (UTC)Reply
    1. 16 again linking
  Done - Sauloviegas (talk) 20:22, 11 March 2011 (UTC)Reply
    1. 17 & #18 need linking, italics and publishers
  Done - Sauloviegas (talk) 20:22, 11 March 2011 (UTC)Reply
    1. 20 linking
  Done - Sauloviegas (talk) 20:22, 11 March 2011 (UTC)Reply
    1. 21 Youtube does not belong on Wikipedia
Removed. - Sauloviegas (talk) 20:22, 11 March 2011 (UTC)Reply
    1. 25 linking, publisher
  Done - Sauloviegas (talk) 20:22, 11 March 2011 (UTC)Reply
    1. 30 needs some work
Generated automatically by Wikipedia. Can't change it. - Sauloviegas (talk) 20:22, 11 March 2011 (UTC)Reply
    • Overall I feel this article as well is a bit rushed. Aside from the facts, there is no compelling or background info on the song. I feel there is more info you could add. Nice work though! :)--CallMeNathanTalk2Me 02:49, 7 March 2011 (UTC)Reply