Talk:Fortnite Festival/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: NegativeMP1 (talk · contribs) 01:49, 7 June 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: BigLordFlash (talk · contribs) 12:27, 16 July 2024 (UTC)

Hi @BigLordFlash, just a reminder ping to complete this review when you have the time. -- asilvering (talk) 01:00, 26 July 2024 (UTC)

@Asilvering, I will complete it today. BigLordFlash^talk 12:13, 26 July 2024 (UTC)

Hello! I will review this article. If you have any questions just talk to me on my talk page.

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it well written?

   A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:

   I left some comments below. BigLordFlash^talk 13:55, 26 July 2024 (UTC)

   B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:

   Nothing wrong here. BigLordFlash^talk 12:38, 16 July 2024 (UTC)

2. Is it verifiable with no original research, as shown by a source spot-check?

   A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:

   It has a list of all references. BigLordFlash^talk 12:38, 16 July 2024 (UTC)

   B. Reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose):

   I did a spot-check below. BigLordFlash^talk 13:07, 26 July 2024 (UTC)

   C. It contains no original research:

   No original research. BigLordFlash^talk 13:07, 26 July 2024 (UTC)

   D. It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism:

   No copyright violations (Earwig) BigLordFlash^talk 12:38, 16 July 2024 (UTC)

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:

   All the main aspects are addressed. BigLordFlash^talk 13:55, 26 July 2024 (UTC)

   B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):

   It stays focused on the topic. BigLordFlash^talk 13:55, 26 July 2024 (UTC)

4. Is it neutral?

   It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:

   It's totally neutral. BigLordFlash^talk 13:55, 26 July 2024 (UTC)

5. Is it stable?

   It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:

   It is stable. BigLordFlash^talk 12:38, 16 July 2024 (UTC)

6. Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?

   A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content:

   No copyright issues. BigLordFlash^talk 12:38, 16 July 2024 (UTC)

   B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:

   Images have suitable captions. BigLordFlash^talk 12:38, 16 July 2024 (UTC)

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail:

Lead

• "perform a song" to "perform songs": Pluralized "song" to match the context where multiple songs are played.
• "achieve" instead of "get": "Achieve" is more formal and fits better in this context.
• "Each song has four different instruments" to "Each song features four different instruments": "Features" is more descriptive and polished.
• "difficulty of the song" to "song's difficulty": Shortened for readability.
• "Higher difficulties changing the layouts of songs" to "Higher difficulties change the layouts of the songs": Corrected the tense and clarified the sentence.
• "Available songs range from those composed by Epic Games Sound Team to tracks from popular artists": Combined sentences for clarity and flow.
• "as a part of the Fortnite launcher" to "as part of the Fortnite launcher": "As part of" is more commonly used.
• "Since release" to "Since its release": Clarified "release" to specify the game.
• "have released, which change the games promotional material to be themed around a specific featured artist" to "have been introduced, each themed around a specific featured artist": Simplified for clarity.
• "allowed the usage of guitar controllers" to "allowed the use of guitar controllers": "Use" is more straightforward.
• "built with the controllers in mind" to "designed with these controllers in mind": "Designed" is more formal and precise.
• "Fortnite Festival received mixed reviews from critics, with criticism toward the price of songs as well as the gameplay" to "Fortnite Festival received mixed reviews from critics, who criticized the price of songs and the gameplay": Combined sentences and made the critique more direct.

Gameplay

• "The player is able to choose" to "The player can choose": Simplified wording.
• "respectfully" to "respectively": Corrected the term.
• "and when playing them attempt" to "and attempts": Corrected subject-verb agreement.
• "with the players score and combo multiplier increasing the more inputs one gets correct" to "Players' scores and combo multipliers increase with accurate inputs": Simplified and clarified the sentence.
• "difficulty options" to "difficulty levels": "Levels" is more commonly used in this context.
• "Additionally, 'pro' options": Removed quotes for consistency.
• "utilizing a different type of note, "hammer-on and pull-off."" to "including "hammer-on and pull-off" notes": Clarified the sentence structure.
• "the multipliers will stack" to "the multipliers stack": Simplified for readability.
• "serve as" instead of "is used as": More concise.
• "The versions of the songs used in this mode are known as "Jam Loops", and are also playable" to "The versions of the songs used in this mode are known as "Jam Loops" and are also playable": Removed unnecessary comma.

Monetization and music selection

• "being composed": The use of "being" is unnecessary and slightly awkward in this context.
• "are provided to the player": Should use "is" to match the singular subject "selection."
• "the player": Repetition can be avoided by using a pronoun.
• "has a price of": Can be simplified to "costs."
• "are able to": Can be simplified to "can."

Seasons

• "are themed around": This is correct, but for parallelism, the second part of the sentence needs to match this plural form.
• "adjusts": Should be "adjust" to match the plural "seasons."
• "to be based around them": Can be simplified and clarified to "accordingly."
• "song": Should be plural "songs" for consistency.
• "though made": Awkward phrasing; can be rephrased for clarity.
• "Fender branded": Should be hyphenated as "Fender-branded."

Development and release

• "Rigopolous": Should be "Rigopulos" for the correct spelling.
• "whilst": "While" is more common in American English.
• "released on": Should be "was released on."
• "to added": Should be "to be added."
• "had supplied": "Had" is unnecessary.
• "for": Should be "with" to match "compatible with."

Reception

• "pointing it out as being": Can be simplified to "pointing out it was."
• "with little difference": Awkward phrasing; better as "with few differences."
• "found the game be unenjoyable": Should be "found the game to be unenjoyable."
• "a great introduction": Should be "as a great introduction."
• "as": Should be "to" for correct comparison (thoughts similar to Taylor's and Dustin's).
• "towards": Should be "toward."
• "was negative": Should be "were negative" to match the plural "responses."
• "from the game": Better phrased as "to the game."
• "to a": Should be "to be a."
• "was effected negatively": Should be "was negatively affected."
• "the lack of interactivity": Unnecessary article "the."

Spot-check

Based on this version

• 1 - Y
• 2 - YTalk
• 3 - Y
• 4 - Y
• 5 - Y
• 6 - Y
• 7 - Y
• 8 - Y
• 9 - Y
• 10 - Y
• 11 - Y
• 12 - Y
• 13 - Y
• 14 - N Not reliable source, as WP:GAMESOURCES.
  • Replaced, the source ended up not even being about what I thought it was anyways (which makes no sense in retrospect how I ended up citing that, but whatever)
• 15 - Y
• 16 - Y
• 17 - Y
• 18 - Y
• 19 - Y
• 20 - Y

Thanks for reviewing this article, I've implemented all suggestions above. λ NegativeMP1 17:46, 26 July 2024 (UTC)

It's a very well written article, without any problems, and meets the criteria for Good Article. I will pass this one. Congratulations! BigLordFlash^talk 10:31, 27 July 2024 (UTC)

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