Talk:Fort Southerland/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Zawed (talk · contribs) 06:41, 2 July 2022 (UTC)

I'll take this one, comments to follow in next few days. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 06:41, 2 July 2022 (UTC)

Sorry it took so long to come back to this, comments as follows.

Lead

• Fort Southerland was included...: suggest breaking the lead here to better differentiate between the historic and modern era.
  • Done

Construction

• They are generally referred to as forts: link forts?
  • Linked at the first mention of forts a bit earlier in the paragraph

Camden Expedition and modern history

• If the sources support it, perhaps add a one-liner to the end of the 2nd paragraph noting that there was (presumably) no further action in the area during the war.
  • I'm fairly sure this is accurate, but haven't seen anything in the sources, or in a couple other things I've checked
• The remains of three of the redoubts were obliterated: perhaps add to the start of the section something to the effect of "In the postwar period, the remains...}}}
  • Done
• Redoubt A, also known as Fort Lookout: for clarity and greater specificity, suggest stating this is the fourth of the redoubts.
  • Clarified
• Despite its original site south of the city, Camden's growth has expanded to the north and west sites of the site.: I am uncertain about the construction of this sentence, particularly the usage of "Despite". I think effectively you are saying the growth of the city to the north and west meant that Fort Southerland, being the southernmost of the original redoubts, is the best preserved.
  • Significantly reworked
    • Wow, I really misunderstood the original sentence. It is much clearer now. Zawed (talk) 09:43, 12 July 2022 (UTC)
• The first sentence of the 4th para is really long and convoluted, suggest breaking it up.
  • Done
• Describing the destruction of the earthworks at Camden: suggest "Describing the destruction of much of the earthworks at Camden", presumably those of Fort Southerland haven't been destroyed.
  • Done

Other stuff

• Sources look OK
• I reviewed reference #3 (Mark K. Christ) against what it was cited for and found no issues there.
• No dupe links
• Image tag checks out OK

Generally looks in order, just minor tweaks required. Zawed (talk) 03:18, 10 July 2022 (UTC)

• @Zawed: - All of these have been addressed. Hog Farm _Talk 23:31, 10 July 2022 (UTC)

• This looks good. I am passing as GA as I believe it meets the necessary criteria. Zawed (talk) 09:45, 12 July 2022 (UTC)