Talk:Cultura Profética/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: IndianBio (talk · contribs) 17:28, 29 August 2015 (UTC)

• The group followed up with Ideas Nuevas in 2000, which saw the group experimenting with a wider variety of musical styles --> Consecutive usage of group should be avoided

 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 23:46, 9 September 2015 (UTC)

• After relocating to Mexico, the band released M.O.T.A. in 2005 --> What happened to this album?

 Done Added a bit of information. Basilisk4u (talk) 23:46, 9 September 2015 (UTC)

• The decade ranges need en-dash instead of a normal dash. Same for the Band Member's list

 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 23:46, 9 September 2015 (UTC)

• There are a number of unnecessary images starting from the discography section. Please remove them as they are simply decorative and not serving any purpose.

 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 23:46, 9 September 2015 (UTC)

• In the main infobox image please name who are the personnel from the band who are pictured.

 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 23:46, 9 September 2015 (UTC)

...Continuing. —Indian:BIO ^{[ ChitChat ]} 15:00, 3 September 2015 (UTC)

Sorry for waiting so long, here's the rest of the review,

• The whole biography portion, the dates are separated by a em-dash (—) instead of en-dash (–). So ideally 1996—99: Formation and Canción de Alerta will actually be like 1996–99: Formation and Canción de Alerta. Correct this throughout.

 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 17:48, 23 September 2015 (UTC)

• Group members Boris Bilbraut, Willy Rodríguez, Eliut González, Juan Costa, and Ivan Gutiérres began jamming together in 1996 --> How did these people come across each other? Where they childhood friends? The biography has abrupt beginning

 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 17:48, 23 September 2015 (UTC)

• I would say the beginning of the first sections second para, "Cultura Profética originally began as a cover band, performing popular reggae songs... " serves as a better introduction.

 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 17:48, 23 September 2015 (UTC)

• according to the guitarist/bassist Omar Silva --> remove "the" in such instances

 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 17:48, 23 September 2015 (UTC)

• The group was the first Spanish-language act to record in Marley's studios --> What does this mean? Marley had a studio? Or is that the name
• or the concept of "negritud", particularly on the song "Advertencia" --> What is this concept and how does that song exemplify this concept.

• Not a ton of information is given in the source, so I have removed the mention of "negritud" and mentioned the "importance of acknowledging the island's African influence" as a general theme of the album. Basilisk4u (talk) 21:47, 25 September 2015 (UTC)

• • Like the above I'm seeing a lot many cases where sentences are left hanging on a loose end throughout the article. The above was one of examples.
• The group's second album, Ideas Nuevas, is dedicated to a music instructor at the school --> This does not belong in the first section, its for the opening verse of the second section

 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 17:48, 23 September 2015 (UTC)

• performance in the form of the album Cultura en Vivo --> performance in the form of the live album, Cultura en Vivo.
• How did the first few albums fared critically and commercially? They need to be mentioned otherwise this article lacks research.

• There is little to no information about the critical and commercial performance of these albums as they were fairly underground independent releases. M.O.T.A and La Dulzura were the only ones to chart. Basilisk4u (talk) 21:47, 25 September 2015 (UTC)

• Ref 7, [1] is not about just Hot Latin Albums, its the Artist page of Hot Latin Albums of Cultura Profética too. Please indicate that in the reference title.

 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 21:47, 25 September 2015 (UTC)

• In 2007, the group released Tribute to the Legend: Bob Marley, a recording of a live performance of Bob Marley covers --> Try this "In 2007, the group released Tribute to the Legend: Bob Marley, which was a live recording of the group performing Bob Marley songs.

 Done Basilisk4u (talk) 21:47, 25 September 2015 (UTC)

• On July 1, 2008, the band performed in an event titled "San Juan Nights" produced by a radio station and organized in San Juan, Puerto Rico --> Similar to this there are multiple instances of mentioning random performances. Well as a musical group it is imperative that they would perform at music events and festivals. But do all of them really warrant a mention? What is it exactly adding to the biographical content about the band as a whole?

• I have removed all instances of performances that where not later released in the form of a live album, as the band has released multiple live albums. Basilisk4u (talk) 21:47, 25 September 2015 (UTC)

• The 2009—present: La Dulzura and upcoming album section begins with events from 2010 ("In 2010, Cultura Profética released La Dulzura...), what happened to events of 2009?

• I have no info about 2009 events, so I have changed the section to encompass 2010-present. Basilisk4u (talk) 21:47, 25 September 2015 (UTC)

More again Basilisk4u. —Indian:BIO ^{[ ChitChat ]} 18:14, 15 September 2015 (UTC)

Basilisk4u you are going to address them aren't you? —Indian:BIO ^{[ ChitChat ]} 17:34, 20 September 2015 (UTC)

Sorry, I'm back now. Thanks for the review! Will address these issues today. Basilisk4u (talk) 16:49, 22 September 2015 (UTC)

Thank you. I will take a look maybe later today. —Indian:BIO ^{[ ChitChat ]} 04:12, 26 September 2015 (UTC)