Talk:Change Your Life (Iggy Azalea song)/GA1

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Reviewer: Shaidar cuebiyar (talk · contribs) 23:39, 20 January 2016 (UTC)

Starting the review

I will be going through each of the criteria below, in order. I reserve the right to return to earlier comments or sections and revise or add to them until the review is finished. Unless otherwise indicated, maintain existing wikilinks and formatting. The review process should take about a week. I will allow an additional week for any requested changes to be made before making my decision.shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 23:39, 20 January 2016 (UTC)

Check the toolbox: you have work to do.shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 03:39, 22 January 2016 (UTC)

Criterion 1

It is reasonably well written.

a (prose, no copyvios, spelling and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

Infobox

1. As with main text, any alt text should use Aus English; e.g. centred. Also, the two font styles are not similar: give a better description.

Please have a look now. CoolMarc 18:44, 3 February 2016 (UTC)

Infobox alt text is good.shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 23:05, 3 February 2016 (UTC)

1. Released = {{Start date|2013|9|12|df=yes}}

Done.

1. Fix Writers =
   1. De-link previously liked (or piped) names.
   2. Give names of The Messengers and link to individuals as writers not to the group/producers (see later).
   3. If this song is based on one originally written by Raja Kumari (and give her birth name) then that individual should be listed first.21:54, 31 January 2016 (UTC)
   4. Azalea's birth name is required for song writing credits.21:54, 31 January 2016 (UTC)

With all due respect, the way they are now credited now is the way they are specifically credited in the album liner notes. I don't think it is up to us to choose how they should be credited. CoolMarc 18:44, 3 February 2016 (UTC)

Criterion 1a has "the prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct". The names given by ASCAP or APRA for song writers are more reliably correct than those given in any liner notes. To rephrase Tom Cruise's Jerry Maguire "who gets the money?", the song's writers want to be paid under the names given in its registration not according to liner notes. In any case, in the article, you have a bit each way by referring to The Messengers as the song's co-writers in the infobox (and Lead) and then specifically mention Nasri Atwek as its co-composer and Adam Messinger being involved in the songwriting process in the main text. You weave a similar wave of inaccuracy with T.I. (Lead) vs Clifford "Tip" Harris (infobox). Clearly the liner notes don't tell the full story: the infobox/Lead should reflect the most reliable source(s) possible.shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 23:05, 3 February 2016 (UTC)

1. After Writers is adjusted per above then; Producers = [[The Messengers (producers)|The Messengers]]

More to follow.shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 23:39, 20 January 2016 (UTC)

Please see my concern above. CoolMarc 18:44, 3 February 2016 (UTC)

I have noted your concern but believe it is introducing a lesser standard of accuracy, as in my reply above.shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 23:05, 3 February 2016 (UTC)

Lead

1. Add an empty new line after the end of the infobox. (Likewise for section or subsection headings).

Done.

1. AUS spelling/grammar: mid-tempo, dub-step, set list 23:23, 24 January 2016 (UTC)

Done.

1. Who is Raja Kumari? As this song is based on her demo, some more detail is needed here.

I have added Indian-American songwriter with a reference in the background section. Is that fine? CoolMarc 18:44, 3 February 2016 (UTC)

Yep.shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 23:05, 3 February 2016 (UTC)

1. written > co-written

Done.

1. The Messengers members should be named, and individually linked, as they are two of the song's seven writers.

Please see my concern above. CoolMarc 18:44, 3 February 2016 (UTC)

Likewise.shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 23:05, 3 February 2016 (UTC)

1. Explain "it features her singing on a track for the first time" Doesn't Azalea sing on her earlier singles/tracks?shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 00:01, 21 January 2016 (UTC)01:50, 21 January 2016 (UTC)

I'm unaware of her mixtape stuff, but it was her first single to feature her actually singing a melody/holding a note and not only rapping. She herself, and critics have noted this. You can hear the difference in the chorus. CoolMarc 18:44, 3 February 2016 (UTC)

Then you need to differentiate better between singing melodically and singing rap.23:05, 3 February 2016 (UTC)

1. Add a hard space between top and 10 for first top 10. (Check wikicode) Likewise for further similar uses.

Done. Thanks for the tip.

1. Delete where it peaked at number 10 This is redundant, given previous part of sentence.

Done.

1. Not sure about the Aus gold cert, but will address this issue later.

I'm removing it altogether as it is still yet to be verified by the ARIA. CoolMarc 18:44, 3 February 2016 (UTC)

Good.shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 23:05, 3 February 2016 (UTC)

Background

1. Relevance of the quote? Wasn't the single released seven months ahead of the album? Is the album version significantly different from the single version? Explain how the quote relates to this specific song.

As mentioned above. Azalea was yet to release a single that featured her singing until "Change Your Life". It was made the song unique, and a big deal for Azalea, a number of publications discussed this feature as well I recall. CoolMarc 19:10, 3 February 2016 (UTC)

But the quote opens with "I wanted to leave something for the album,". If this single has been released seven months ahead of the album then how has she left "something for the album"? Hasn't she already done the melodic singing well before the album how is this giving "something new" for it?shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 23:05, 3 February 2016 (UTC)

1. Careful of overuse of terms: song, Azalea, collaborate

I've mixed it up as much as I could now. Please check. CoolMarc 19:10, 3 February 2016 (UTC)

More effort is needed on this, both here and elsewhere: the prose becomes difficult to read with repeated instances of these (and other) overused terms.shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 23:05, 3 February 2016 (UTC)

1. As per Lead explain who Kumari is. Furthermore, did the recorded demo version already have lyrics before it was offered to Azalea? This may be dealt with in Composition.

I've added "Indian-American songwriter" with a source. According to Kumari, Azalea wrote new verses after the demo was played to her management. CoolMarc 19:10, 3 February 2016 (UTC)

Good.shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 23:05, 3 February 2016 (UTC)

1. Who is Natalie Sims?shaidar cuebiyar (talk)

She's a Canadian singer and songwriter, though the only source I have for this is her own website. CoolMarc 19:10, 3 February 2016 (UTC)

Ahem, I know who she is. I meant tell the casual reader, since she does not have a separate wp entry: add something like , a Canadian singer-songwriter, after her first mention in the main text. You don't need to provide a citation her nationality or occupation for this article.shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 23:05, 3 February 2016 (UTC)

1. Rephrase the sentences starting with "Azalea's verses were written" and ending at "visitors or interruptions." Currently reads as a contradiction: she wrote in one place in Wales (with T.I.) vs she wrote in another place in isolation. This needs to be clarified.
2. For concision, trim believed the isolation was needed because she felt she wrote
3. Explain "The song was inspired by a personal experience". Remember that Kumari had already written the song as a demo and presumably Kumari didn't write it about Azalea's personal experiences. If you're talking about the later verses written by Azalea then this needs to be specified.
4. Expression, use of reflexive pronoun to begin a relationship with her > to begin a relationship with herself
5. Concision: The experience in turn made Azalea want > Consequently she wanted
6. Previous collaborations on Glory: where's "Millionaire Misfits"?
7. Time-related: throughout her career > through her early career I believe Azalea and T.I are estranged, since September 2015, e.g. here. Likewise reword the following sentence: the friendship seems ended.
8. ¶3: I don't believe your distinction between "singing" and "rapping" is accessible to the average reader. I believe that rapping, as used in hip-hop songs or by rappers, is a sub-category of singing. You seem to be using a very narrow definition of "singing" which has it meaning the vocals used in popular music melodies. This needs to be clarified as it relates to the claim in the Lead (mentioned above).shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 04:50, 21 January 2016 (UTC)

Composition

1. For sound file description: check tense bass instruments is featured
2. Explain pertains "swagger". Maybe demonstrates "swagger"? or other more accessible verb.
3. What is the relevance of the sentence: "Her first verse opens with the lyrics..."?
4. What is the nature of the comparison(s) described in "Musically, the song was compared..."
5. Likewise explain the lyrical comparison(s) to "material by Kanye West, and Beyoncé's "Upgrade U""shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 06:03, 21 January 2016 (UTC)

Release

1. Trim opening sentence's direct quote: far too long.
2. Additional overused terms: Azalea, 2013, single
3. Idol Magazine
4. You don't mention the track appearing on the parent album and whether there are any differences between the two.shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 06:41, 21 January 2016 (UTC)

Critical reception

1. Reword the caption, it gives false impression that:
   1. Adam Messinger is the sole producer of "Change Your Life"
   2. Messinger is awarded only for his work on "Change Your Life"
2. ¶1 is far too long: split it.
3. Reduce over used terms: song, Azalea, crumpet (3× in 2 sentences)
4. Lead-in sentence has a hefty claim. The album has a Metacritic rating of mixed or average (see here). Some negative or mixed reviews of the album may provide non-favourable reviews of the track or related material.
5. Consider NME review, here. You've misquoted Andrews who says "Essentially, The New Classic is an extended version of 'Change Your Life''s class-mobility fantasy, privileging diamonds ['Fuck Love'] and blonde ambition ['Impossible Is Nothing'] over wit, personality and lyrical prowess." This is a negative commentary on the album and on "Change Your Life", specifically. Andrews does not feel the track showcases "her wit, personality or lyrical prowess" but rather that her work showcases her "class-mobility fantasy, privileging diamonds and blonde ambition" to the detriment of those attributes.shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 03:42, 22 January 2016 (UTC)
6. Rephrase Empire named it as, the following quote is not the naming of anything.
7. The mixed/negative reviews in ¶3 belie the Lead-in sentence: it needs to be changed.shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 04:20, 22 January 2016 (UTC)

More to follow.shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 04:20, 22 January 2016 (UTC)

Commercial performance

1. Start with the UK Singles Chart and No. 10 placement using the Official Charts Company ref; before giving analysis of charting via Music Week. (Note: add hard space between No. and 10. Likewise for similar, elsewhere).
2. AUS certified gold requires an ARIA ref not SBS News ref. If you can't find an ARIA ref, the claim will need to be removed per Criterion #2. Considering that it reached No. 44, stayed in the top 50 for only that one week; it is unlikely to have reached gold status unless in stayed in the top 100 for a long time.shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 06:17, 22 January 2016 (UTC)

More to follow.shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 06:17, 22 January 2016 (UTC)

Music video

1. This whole section seems unduly large for an article which should be primarily about a song itself.

Background and development

1. Image caption, add Las Vegas (not wikilinked)
2. Delink common terms: Las Vegas, showgirls (it goes to the film of that name, which is not applicable here)
3. Overused terms: video, Azalea, showgirls, film, Nomi
4. Delete latter part of the clause: the idea of having "a big show" for the "Change Your Life" music video Its redundant, we know the context from earlier in same ¶.
5. Check usage of "past-time" and "where" in "She recalled a past-time where" Do you mean "She recalled a time passed when"?
6. What is Cheetah's, even though it has a wL, a brief description is warranted.
7. Missing a word: inspired the film's
8. Update "to address recent criticism of her small breasts" According to a Vogue report she had undergone breast augmentation in December 2014. How does her effort at "female empowerment" stand a year or so later?
9. Fix She and T.I.'s wardrobe: use the possessive pronoun.shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 23:59, 23 January 2016 (UTC)

Synopsis

1. Since this is a synopsis of a 3:39 video it hardly requires so much description.
2. Overused terms: video, Azalea, showgirl
3. Check AUS Eng spelling/grammar: intercut, boyshorts, enter's, pantsuit, backseat
4. Delink: dice, cigar, Mercedes-Benz
5. Is T.I. upset or is Azalea upset? Sentence is ambiguous.
6. What is a "double-belter"?shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 00:39, 24 January 2016 (UTC)

Release and reception

1. Overused terms: Azalea
2. number one > number-one for adjective usage
3. Given her championing of "women who have smaller breasts" was there any subsequent social media back lash when Azalaea had breast augmentation about a year later?
4. Adjust Oyster described it, insert "writer" or similar after the magazine's name and before "described".shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 03:35, 24 January 2016 (UTC)

Live performances and usage in media

1. File image alt text replace "A young blond woman" with "Azalea": her description in an earlier section allows this identification.
2. Delink and AUS Eng: set list
3. when she was No location is given in the sentence only a date.
4. What is 106 & Park? Brief description required.
5. Overused terms: Azalea, 2013
6. Change during: her sets during Beyoncé's perhaps supporting
7. Adjust In 2014, insert month(s) of the tour ahead of the year and lose the comma.
8. Delink: soundtrack shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 23:23, 24 January 2016 (UTC)

Formats and track listings

1. Is Iggy only version same as solo version?shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 23:28, 24 January 2016 (UTC)

Credits and personnel

1. Writers have already been credited earlier, not needed here.
2. Are the album credits specific to this track? Is the single version the same as the album version?shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 23:35, 24 January 2016 (UTC)

Charts

1. Remove italics from EP, only the title is italicised.shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 23:44, 24 January 2016 (UTC)

Certifications

1. Seems OKshaidar cuebiyar (talk) 23:49, 24 January 2016 (UTC)

Radio and release history

1. Was it released in Australia?

More to follow.shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 23:52, 24 January 2016 (UTC)

Criterion 2

It is factually accurate and verifiable.

a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

References

I will be checking all the references and each comment below is under their number as they existed at this time. The order in the article may change from this numbering as refs get moved, added or deleted. Newspapers, journals and other works are generally italicised but publishers are not. Use dmy dates for date, archive date and retrieved date. Every effort should be made to identify author(s).shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 23:59, 24 January 2016 (UTC)

1. Ref format is good, content verified.
2. Author of source is named (albeit, seems to be a nickname). Songwriters are according to Raja Kumari: not an independent source. Only acknowledges: Kumari (self), Atweh, Longomba and Azalea. No mention of Harris (aka T.I.), Messinger or Sims. You'll need a better ref for the song's writers try an ASCAP or APRA title search.
3. Catalogue number appears to be for UK version of album. Is there a reliable on-line version? Content can not be checked/verified by this reviewer.
4. Content at b not supported. She says "That's when I wrote most of the songs. 'Rolex', 'Work', 'Change Your Life', those were all done then." They were written first but it does not mean they were recorded before other tracks.shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 01:19, 25 January 2016 (UTC)
5. Fix author link per |last=McGuire|first=Michaela|authorlink=Michaela McGuire. Exact location in Wales is not specified here.
6. MoS title, per One from the Archives: The Interview: Iggy Azalea. Exact Welsh location is not specified.
7. Can't be verified by this reviewer.
8. MoS title with, give interviewer's full name and wikilink to his article. At b interviewer should be mentioned.
9. Dead link? Content not verifiable. Also fix title per MoS. However see entry below for ref [13] use a slightly different url.23:40, 25 January 2016 (UTC)
10. Dead link? Content not verifiable.shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 04:19, 25 January 2016 (UTC) Try Wayback Machine, here.23:40, 25 January 2016 (UTC)
11. Direct quotes from the video of the interview will each require a time value to help find them. Content verified.
12. MoS title: italics for The New Classic. Content supported.
13. MoS title. Where did you find author name? In fact, this report is a summary by XXL staff of an earlier one (see here probably the one for ref [9] above?). The cited quote was made in that earlier interview by Diep. Use the original interview, giving credit to the original author.shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 23:40, 25 January 2016 (UTC)
14. MoS title: as an EP, Change Your Life, should be in italics, here. Content verified.
15. MoS title: hyphen > dash. Content verified.
16. Add "dance" to main text ahead of "synth pop". Content verified.
17. Verifies only "synth heavy" at a, partial at c, content not verified at d or f, partial at g. Other content is verified.shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 02:59, 26 January 2016 (UTC)
18. MoS title. url is Redirected to a generic Latest Reviews page, not the expected source. Content not verified.
19. MoS title. Content verified.
20. Content verified.
21. Point about "swagger" is repeated at both cites: a little redundant. Content verified.
22. MoS title. Content at a or b is not verified in the material that this reviewer could access.
23. MoS title. Content verified.shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 05:32, 26 January 2016 (UTC)
24. Content verified.
25. MoS title. Should be used at end of previous sentence. Does not verify content at a, does at b.
26. MoS title. Content verified at a. I have a big problems with its use at b, as indicated above. I believe the meaning has been reversed in your usage such that Richardson Andrews is being misquoted.
27. MoS title. Content verified.
28. MoS title. Shift tab at a to earlier in the sentence, just after "life,". At b the comparison relates to "theme and tone" not exactly "lyrically" as claimed.shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 04:36, 27 January 2016 (UTC)
29. MoS title (EP). May need an archiveurl (see here). Content verified.
30. MoS title. Content verified.
31. MoS title. Content verified.
32. Content verified: "Kanye-like absurdity".
33. At b main text has "later stated", the ref is in same month, you can drop the "later". Content verified.
34. Is Idol a magazine or journal? Rebecca Moore and Jessica Duffin are the publishers. Content verified.shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 05:35, 27 January 2016 (UTC)
35. Partial confirmation: this ref does not describe bikini.
36. Not checkable by this reviewer.
37. Dead archiveurl? Is another archive date possible? MoS title. At a and c release date not verified. At b content verified.
38. MoS title: for. Content verified.
39. Content verified.shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 21:56, 27 January 2016 (UTC)
40. MoS title. Verifies date & tracks on EP but not exact mixes.
41. Dead url? Redirected to generic, non-relevant page. Needs an archiveurl (e.g. here). Content verified.
42. MoS title. Content verified.
43. MoS title. Content verified.
44. MoS title. Content verified.
45. How is Matt's CD Singles an independent reliable source?
46. MoS title. Content verified.shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 09:31, 28 January 2016 (UTC)
47. MoS title. At a source does not specify how the track has changed for Iggy Only version.
48. MoS title. Content not verifiable by this reviewer.
49. Content not verified: according to the source this award was given to Messinger for co-producing, not (sole) producing, "Change Your Life"; and also for producing another work, "Rude". The omissions are misrepresenting the source.
50. Content verified.shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 03:59, 29 January 2016 (UTC)
51. Mos title. Content not verified: use of direct quote marks are not justified. Actual quote is "her most catchy pop-sounding song yet" Removing the "pop-sounding" qualifier distorts Dean's meaning.
52. MoS title. Content verified.
53. MoS title. Content verified.
54. Content verified.
55. MoS title. Unrepresentative quote: dropping the words "slabs of indulgent" gives a false impression of Day's sentiment. As it stands it seems Day's opinion is wholly positive, whereas the actual quote contains at least some negativity.
56. MoS title. "rapid fire" yes but also "if at times obnoxiously forced". Again selectively quoted to misrepresent the author's mixed opinion.
57. One of the album's three highlights is verified, other content not supported.
58. MoS title. Content verified.
59. MoS title. Content verified.
60. MoS title. Content verified.shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 21:15, 29 January 2016 (UTC)
61. Content verified.
62. MoS title. Content verified.
63. MoS title. Content verified.
64. Subscription required. Content not verifiable by this reviewer.
65. Content not verifiable by this reviewer.
66. Content not verifiable by this reviewer.
67. Content verified.
68. Website appears to be sponsored by GfK. Misleading: they are not responsible for the Irish Singles Chart. Content verified, but a better source should be supplied e.g. irma.ie or the next ref.
69. Content verified. Previous ref not needed.
70. MoS title. Attributions required to New Zealand Charts Portal and Hung Medien/Steffen Hung not Official New Zealand Music Chart (although they supplied the base information they did not publish/author this version of it).
71. MoS title. Attributions required to Australia Charts Portal and Hung Medien/Steffen Hung not ARIA Charts (although they supplied the base information they did not publish/author this version of it).
72. Not verified. An ARIA ref is required for AUS certifications not SBS.
73. Content not verifiable by this reviewer.
74. Content not verifiable by this reviewer. Alternative reliable (no subscription required) source is available, here.
75. Content not verifiable by this reviewer. Alternative reliable (no subscription required) source is available, here.
76. Content not verifiable by this reviewer.
77. Content not verifiable by this reviewer.
78. Content verified.
79. Content not verifiable by this reviewer.
80. Content not verifiable by this reviewer.
81. Content not verifiable by this reviewer.
82. Content verified.shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 02:22, 31 January 2016 (UTC)
83. At a Shot in Vegas but when and for how long not verified. Content at b verified.
84. MoS title. Content verified.
85. MoS title. Content verified.
86. MoS title. Some content not verified, can't see "love interest".
87. MoS title: by. Content at f not fully verified here, otherwise okay.
88. Content verified. Covers material missing at previous ref.
89. MoS title. Content verified.
90. MoS title. Content verified.shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 03:27, 31 January 2016 (UTC)
91. MoS title: hyphens > dash.
92. MoS title. Content verified.
93. Appellation of "not safe for work" or "not suitable for work" is not seen: keep 18+ from source.
94. Give full category of the award: Best Urban Video – International (as opposed to Budget or UK). Content verified once category is adapted.
95. Content verified (if category adapted per above).
96. Content verified.
97. MoS title: in. Content verified.
98. Content verified.
99. MoS title: for. Content verified.
100. MoS title: with. Content verified.shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 04:44, 31 January 2016 (UTC)
101. MoS title: as. Content verified.
102. Content verified. Showgirls should be specified to provided context.
103. MoS title. Bianca Jagger's suit should be mentioned as a common point for both "It's My Life" and this video.
104. MoS title. Content verified.
105. Content not verified: no indication that "Change Your Life" was performed.
106. Content not verifiable by this reviewer.
107. Content not verifiable by this reviewer.
108. Content verified.
109. Content not verifiable by this reviewer.
110. Content not verified: no indication that "Change Your Life" was performed.
111. Content not verifiable by this reviewer.
112. Content verified.shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 05:27, 31 January 2016 (UTC)
113. Content not verifiable by this reviewer.
114. MoS title: italics for film title.
115. Content verified.
116. MoS title: del website (its cited as Ultratip, later). Additional attributions needed: Hung Medien & Steffen Hung. Content verified.
117. Same url as previous ref? Is it Ultratip or Ultratop? Fix and combine with previous.
118. Content verified.
119. Content verified.
120. Content verified.
121. Content verified.
122. Content verified. Could replace a subscription required ref?
123. Content verified. Could replace a subscription required ref?
124. Content verified.shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 06:16, 31 January 2016 (UTC)

Criterion 3

It is broad in its coverage.

a (major aspects): b (focused):

• With the previously indicated changes appropriately handled, this should be passed as well.shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 06:23, 31 January 2016 (UTC)

Criterion 4

It follows the neutral point of view policy.

Fair representation without bias:

• Some sources have been contradicted or misrepresented (see above) and so the article's content should be modified.
• Much content remains unverifiable by this reviewer, hence neutrality can not be determined.shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 06:29, 31 January 2016 (UTC)

Criterion 5

It is stable.

No edit wars, etc.:

• Acceptable at this criterion.shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 06:30, 31 January 2016 (UTC)

Criterion 6

It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

• Infobox image: As indicated above, alt text should be modified for AUS English and for error in description of the fonts.
• Sound file: sample size/quality is good. Summary does not correctly list all the song's writers; fix: Iggy Azalea, Raja Kumari, The Messengers.
• Messinger: fix caption per descriptions above.
• Plaza Hotel: all good.
• Screenshot: all good.
• Live performance: adj alt text per description above.shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 07:03, 31 January 2016 (UTC)

Overall

Overall:

Pass/Fail:

@Coolmarc: You have seven days to address the issues raised in this review.shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 07:06, 31 January 2016 (UTC)

Shaidar cuebiyar Greetings. Thanks so much for the very thorough review. I have been on a bit of a Wikibreak recently and shall try my best to address everything within the given period. Regards. CoolMarc 18:20, 3 February 2016 (UTC)

@Coolmarc: Other than a run of five edits on 4 February there has not been much of an effort to address these criteria. Unfortunately the article fails at this time. If you believe that you did not receive an adequate review, you may renominate the article immediately or ask to have the article reassessed.shaidar cuebiyar (talk) 04:31, 11 February 2016 (UTC)04:34, 11 February 2016 (UTC)