Talk:Brock Bowers

GA Review

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Reviewer: JTtheOG (talk · contribs) 03:53, 1 July 2023 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

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Hello! I'll be conducting this Good Article review! JTtheOG (talk) 03:53, 1 July 2023 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):

   b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a. (reference section):

   b. (citations to reliable sources):

   c. (OR):

   d. (copyvio and plagiarism):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a. (major aspects):

   b. (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):

   b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/fail:

(Criteria marked are unassessed)

Lead

• MOS:LEADLENGTH says the lead for articles with 15,000–30,000 characters should be two to three paragraphs, so the lead should be lengthened to at least two full paragraphs. You can give a broad overview of the article and then go into detail, mentioning his high school career and more about college. You could also mention he was a four-star recruit.
  • Added to the lead, although it is still only one paragraph.

Early life and high school career

• Reference 1 does not mention his date of birth.
  • Done
• Reference 3 does not mention Warren was All-Big West.
  • It comes from his UGA bio which is an external link at the bottom. I can add the bio as an inline citation or leave it as is depending on your preference.
• "After graduating his mother became a high school math teacher" → "After graduating, his mother became a high school math teacher"
  • Done
• Add wikilinks to the first mentions of basketball, baseball and soccer, as well as to the first mentions of each of the football positions.
  • Done
• "receiving a flurry of offers" → "about a dozen offers"
  • Done
• "Bowers accounted for 1,499 all-purpose yards, set a school record with 14 touchdown receptions" → "Bowers accounted for 1,499 all-purpose yards and set a school record with 14 touchdown receptions"
  • Done
• "0-10" → "0–10"
  • Done
• Link COVID-19 pandemic
  • Done
• "he would stay in shape by running up and down the hills of Napa" → "he stayed in shape by running up and down the Napa hills"
  • Done

Recruiting

• "sought after" → "sought-after"
  • Done
• "4 star recruit and the 3rd ranked" → "four-star recruit and the third-ranked"
  • Done
• Remove the subsequent wikilink of recruit
  • Done
• Should mention that his recruiting ranking is according to 247Sports.
  • Done
• "Despite being from the west coast, Bowers wanted to play college football in the south, due to the regions passion for football" → "Despite being from the West coast, Bowers wanted to play college football in the South due to the region's passion for the sport"
  • Done
• "with the teams tight ends coach" → "with the team's tight ends coach"
  • Done

College career

2021

• I suggest breaking up the second sentence in half because it's running on.
  • Done
• Use – instead of - for all the game scores.
  • Done
• "In his first career game, Bowers led the Bulldogs in receiving with six receptions" → "In his first career game, Bowers led the Bulldogs in receiving with six catches"
  • Done
• "career long" → "career-long"
  • Done
• Wikilink Blowout (sports)
  • Done
• "On October 16, he had another 100 yard performance" → "On October 16, he had another 100-yard performance"
  • Done
• Reference 19 says he had six catches in the game while article says five.
  • ESPN and CBS gamelogs both have it as 5, replaced the source.
• "Bowers would have additional multi touchdown performances" → "Bowers had additional multi-touchdown performances"
• Can you find better sources for Reference 20? Though this isn't necessary.
  • Done
• It might be important to note he set an SEC championship game record against Alabama.
  • Done
• Avoid using # per MOS:HASH
  • Done
• "Bowers would have 5 receptions for 55 yards and a touchdown" → "Bowers made five receptions for 55 yards and a touchdown"
  • Done
• Can you find a source for his performance in the national championship game that combines the info from References 23 and 24? Again, not completely necessary.
• "with just over 3 minutes left in the game to extend the Bulldogs lead to 8 points" → "with just over three minutes remaining which extend the Bulldogs' lead to eight points"
  • Done

2022

• You should mention he was a Walter Camp preseason All-American.
  • I can change (and source) the sentence to mention that nearly every major media outlet (ESPN, AP, PFF, CBS) had him as preseason All-Amercian as it would be odd just to mention Walter Camp.
• Can you perhaps find better sources for Reference 32? Not necessary. Plus, I understand sometimes there's just not a good source.
  • Done
• Reference 35 does not mention total rushing yards.
  • Added source
• "career high" → "career-high"
  • Done
• "off of a deflection, that some media outlets dubbed" → "off of a deflection which some media outlets dubbed"
  • Done
• "Georgia would defeat Ohio State 42–41 to advance to the national championship." - Source this sentence
  • Done
• Add comma after "At the conclusion of his sophomore season"
  • Done
• "won the John Mackey Award for the nations best tight end" → "won the John Mackey Award for the nation's best tight end"
  • Done

References

• Add wikilinks to publications such as The Wall Street Journal instead of WSJ on Reference 14 or The Atlanta Journal-Constitution instead of ajc on Reference 21. Other examples include wikilinks for San Francisco Chronicle, Napa Valley Register, Yahoo! Sports, and Bleacher Report.
• Fix capitalization in author's name on Reference 16.
  • Done
• Write out the complete dates for dates and access-dates for consistent formatting. For example, April 17, 2023 instead of 2023-04-17 on Reference 1.
  • Done
• I can't seem to access Reference 10, but if you can then I'll AGF.
  • Link must have died, replaced with different source.

General comments

• Is there anything that can be added for a personal life section? I saw in one of the sources that his sister plays or played college softball at Sacramento State.
  • He has some notable brand deals (Dick's, Zaxby's, NoBull) that I could mention as well as a girlfriend but I doubt it would be a very good section as most of his family info is in the early life section already.
• No stability concerns in the revision history
• Copyvio score looks good

Am placing the review on hold to allow the nominator to address the points raised above JTtheOG (talk) 22:21, 1 July 2023 (UTC)

@JTtheOG I believe that I have addressed everything. Newtothisedit (talk) 02:33, 2 July 2023 (UTC)

Good work here. I know being asked to make a bunch of edits is never easy. I fixed two of the dates that were still in the numbers-only formatting. Could you make a quick mention of his sister playing at Sac State? After that, it should be ready to go. JTtheOG (talk) 02:58, 2 July 2023 (UTC)

@JTtheOG Fixed Newtothisedit (talk) 10:04, 2 July 2023 (UTC)

Done. Listing the article now. Congrats! JTtheOG (talk) 18:37, 2 July 2023 (UTC)