Talk:Break My Heart Again/GA2

Latest comment: 4 years ago by Kyle Peake in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 05:37, 18 September 2020 (UTC)Reply


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Criteria: 1a. prose ( ) 1b. MoS ( ) 2a. ref layout ( ) 2b. cites WP:RS ( ) 2c. no WP:OR ( ) 2d. no WP:CV ( )
3a. broadness ( ) 3b. focus ( ) 4. neutral ( ) 5. stable ( ) 6a. free or tagged images ( ) 6b. pics relevant ( )
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked   are unassessed

Reunited with you for this review, which I will begin later today! --K. Peake 05:37, 18 September 2020 (UTC)Reply

Infobox and lead

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  • Cover art needs alt text
  • Finneas should be listed by his real name under songwriters
  • Why is he not listed as the producer?
  • "as a single on February 9, 2018, for digital download and streaming." → "for digital download and streaming as a single on February 9, 2018." with the appropriate target
  • "It was later re-released" → "The song was later included"
  • "of his debut EP," → "of Finneas' debut EP,"
  • Target ballad to Sentimental ballad
  • "A one-take music video was" → "An accompanying one-take music video was" with the appropriate wikilink
  • "turns around the singer as he sings to about" → "moves around Finneas as he sings about"
  • Add a sentence about the video's reception since you have enough material in the body
  • "performed the track during" → "performed "Break My Heart Again" as part of"

Background and composition

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  • Target single to Single (music)
  • "through his record label" → "through Finneas' record label" with the wikilink
  • "It was later re-released" → "It was later featured"
  • "EP Blood Harmony, on August 7, 2020." → "EP Blood Harmony (2019), released on August 7, 2020."
  • Where does the source say he wrote and produced it?
  • "described the track as" → "described "Break My Heart Again" as"
  • "piano appears and accompanies" → "piano appears that accompanies"
  • "can be heard for almost the whole song." → "is heard for the majority of the song:"
  • ""Break My Heart Again" is almost" → "The lyrics of "Break My Heart Again" are almost"
  • "between himself and" → "between Finneas and"
  • "Finneas explained" → "Finneas explained the texting"
  • "admitting his emotions. His voice" → "admitting his strong emotions and Finneas' voice"
  • "He confesses to being" → "Finneas confesses to being"
  • "gets to a point that" → "gets to a point where"
  • "He then realizes if he's" → "Finneas goes on to realize that he may be"
  • "the former to do so." → "the former to hurt him,"
  • "The bridge takes suggests" → "The bridge suggests" with the target
  • "“the one”," → ""the one","
  • "and that their relationship is over." → "and their relationship is over for good."
  • "Finneas then reveals they reunite" → "Finneas then reveals they reunited"
  • "comes to a stop." → "temporarily comes to a stop."
  • "over again with just piano" → "over again, featuring piano"
  • "He says that" → "He confesses that"
  • "the person he loves is" → "his ex-lover is"
  • "and more stripped back." → "and stripped back heavier."

Critical reception

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  • "received mainly positive reviews" → "was met with mainly positive reviews"
  • "Kasey Caminiti writing for DuJour" → "Kasey Caminiti, writing for DuJour,"
  • "and "relatable". And further mentions" → "and "relatable", while further mentioning"
  • "and melody, which, according to him, are" → "and melody of the song, which he viewed as"
  • "Writing for Atwood Magazine, Nicole Almeida" → "For Atwood Magazine, Nicole Almeida"
  • "and stated it is" → "and stated that it is"
  • "of O'Connell's supreme" → "of [Finneas'] supreme" since it is confusing for some readers otherwise
  • "and complimented that it has" → "and complimented the"
  • "and the listeners should" → "while opining that the listeners should"
  • "Modestas Mankus, writing for" → "Modestas Mankus, for"

Promotion

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  • Retitle to Music video and promotion
  • Wikilink music video
  • The word official is not needed here
  • "while shot in one take in black and white." → "while it was shot in one black and white take." with the wikilink
  • "around the singer as he sings" → "around Finneas as he sings,"
  • "how hard it is of letting go" → "how hard it is to let go"
  • "the singer as he sings, and includes the sounds" → "his singing, alongside the sounds"
  • "was positively received by music critics" → "was positively received by critics"
  • "labeled the visual as" → "noted the visual for"
  • "performed "Break My Heart Again" during" → "performed "Break My Heart Again" live during"

Release history

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  • See MOS:TABLECAPTION
  • You need to cite numerous iTunes retailers to verify the release was various

References

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  • Make sure all of these are archived by using the tool
  • Copyvio score looks safe at 37.5%
  • Ref 1 should use the multiple citations template to add the various ones and put retailers in brackets; (US), for example
  • Target Insider to Insider (website) on ref 12 per MOS:LINK2SECT

Final comments and verdict

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Kyle Peake, I have done everything that you asked! Lmk if anything else needs to be done. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 06:20, 19 September 2020 (UTC)Reply