Talk:Braathens SAFE Flight 139
Latest comment: 15 years ago by Dough4872 in topic GA Review
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Burst?
editBurst? Towards the end of the first paragraph in the aftermath section it says” he burst just prior to the incident.” I doubt that this is what is really meant.Petethewhistle (talk) 18:12, 21 September 2009 (UTC)
GA Review
edit- This review is transcluded from Talk:Braathens SAFE Flight 139/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.
Reviewer: ---Dough4872 16:25, 13 November 2009 (UTC)
Comments:
- "no-one"? I don't think it should be hyphenated in this context.
- The sentence "During the whole incident, Huseby repeatedly asked for and drank beer" seems redundant to the sentence "During the flight, Huseby consumed several beers." in the prior paragraph.
- Combine the sentences "At 18:30, the aircraft was out of beer. Huseby made an agreement where he would throw the gun out of the window in exchange for more beer. This was delivered by a civilian police officer."
- In sentence "Huseby made an agreement where he would throw the gun out of the window in exchange for more beer.", change "where" to "that".
- The sentence "During the court case, Huseby stated that he wanted help from society, that he wanted attention drawn to his cause, but that he regretted doing this by hijacking." sounds awkward.
- Are there any pictures of the hijacking available?
I am placing the article on hold. ---Dough4872 16:25, 13 November 2009 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review. I have fixed up the issues above. Again, I havn't found any suitable images, although for this incident I actually have seen one in a book, but it was over two pages, so it wouldn't be scanable (without wrecking the book, which isn't mine). Arsenikk (talk) 15:35, 14 November 2009 (UTC)
- I will pass the article. ---Dough4872 01:22, 15 November 2009 (UTC)