Talk:Boone Jenner

GA Review

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Nominator: HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk · contribs)

Reviewer: Bruxton (talk · contribs) 16:43, 22 March 2024 (UTC)

Review

I am happy to review this article. I go through the review rather methodically. I will make suggestions for you to consider. Bruxton (talk) 16:43, 22 March 2024 (UTC)

Bruxton, Thanks so much for taking on this article! HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 18:36, 22 March 2024 (UTC)

@HickoryOughtShirt?4: I have completed much of the review and will do a final check after you have a look at the concerns listed. Bruxton (talk) 14:35, 23 March 2024 (UTC)

@HickoryOughtShirt?4: Thank you for your edits. There is one concern that has not been addressed and I marked it as not done below. Bruxton (talk) 19:52, 23 March 2024 (UTC)

Yes, sorry I wasn’t done yet. Will complete it shortly. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 21:51, 23 March 2024 (UTC)

Lead

Y all of the facts in the lead are repeated in the body with citations. The lead appears to summarize the article well

Grammar

Lead

Y "As a youth, Jenner played four seasons of major junior hockey" Consider, is there another word we can use in place of youth?  Done

• I changed it to teenager because he was 19 in his last season, thus still a teenager.

Y "Due to his junior play, Jenner was selected by Columbus" Due to his junior play feels clumsy to me  Done

• Changed to His play with the Generals resulted in....

Y "Jenner won gold" consider "gold medal"  Done

Early life

Y "to parents Matt and Terri Jenner as the youngest of three boys" consider "and he was the youngest"  Done

Amateur

Y "Jenner was a runner up" I think in this context "runner–up" should be hyphenated  Done

Y "Rookie of the year" consider capitalizing "Year"  Done

Y "to regain his scoring touch" consider that "scoring touch" is ambiguous and colloquial  Done

• Changed to After coming back to the lineup, he faced difficulties in recapturing his scoring form

Y "before being returned to the Generals" consider this makes him seem like a thing that was returned. Maybe "he returned"  Done

Y "While Jenner did not play in Canada's bronze medal game due to a suspension," consider there was no talk of his suspension prior to the sentence.  Done

• I added the word elbowing

Y hat trick should bee both linked and hyphenated "hat-trick" first occurrence  Done

Y 2–1 and others like it should probably be 2–1  Done

Y "although they would eventually be eliminated" should probably be past tense "they were"  Done

Early years (2012–2016)

Y "whom helped him score his first and second NHL goals on October" maybe consider changing whom to who  Done

Y "His rookie season was cut short however" consider His rookie season ended after he suffered a leg injury"  Done

Y "He also helped the team set a new franchise record with an eight consecutive winning streak" consider "eight consecutive wins"  Done

Y "Jenner was held to only 31 games during" consider "Jenner only played in 31 games during"  Done

Y "Jenner was shortly thereafter placed on their injured" consider "shortly thereafter" seems clumsy  Done

Y "power play goals" consider hyphenating power-play  Done

Y "He continued to produce offensively" consider produce on offense  Done

Finding post-season success, captaincy (2016–present)

Y "Jenner experienced a brief dip in scoring" brief dip seems colloquial and undefined  Done

• Changed to slowed down

Y "by the mid-point of February" consider middle  Done

Y "Coming off his poor season" consider After his poor season  Done

Y "In spite of the move" consider "Despite"  Done I may have been mistaken about this request and have placed a message for the nominator. talk page message Bruxton (talk) 18:19, 26 March 2024 (UTC)

? "Jenner still experienced lengthy scoring droughts" consider a better word in place of droughts  Done

• I merged this sentence and the next so it now says Despite the move, Jenner still struggled to score consistently until the Blue Jackets acquired Thomas Vanek after the NHL Trade Deadline

Y "They struggled to develop chemistry as a line" consider that develop chemistry may not be easy for non english speakers to understand since nothing involves science here.  Done

• Just removed it so it now says They struggled as a line and were slow to produce points over the first few games of their series against the Washington Capitals

Y "offseason training regime." consider "regimen"  Done

Y "The trio immediately developed chemistry together" consider other description of their ability to work together

• Just removed it so it now says The trio immediately became a line that was considered to "embody the club’s identity."

Y "Jenner went pointless" consider "went without scoring a goal"  Done

Y " Anderson returned the lines were once again rearraigned. Jenner" consider another word for "rearraigned" or correct spelling  Done

Y "Although his linemates shuffled due to injuries in the lineup" consider that this wording seems clumsy  Done

Y "He began the season strong, tallying two goals" consider another word for strong  Done

Y "play all of his 500th career NHL games" 500th seems incorrect in this sentence  Done

Y "Jakub Voracek and playing on the top power play unit." I think power play needs hyphen  Done

Y "they immediately returned to form and picked up in scoring." consider copyediting the sentence as is ambiguous in descrioption  Done

Y "In spite of their production, the Blue Jackets maintained a losing 20–22–1" consider "Despite"  Done

Y "passing Cam Atkinson for second most played in franchise history." consider adding a determiner like "the" before second  Done

Y "In spite of his personal achievements during the season" consider removing "personal"  Done

Y "On November 18, Jenner skating in his 675th" consider using the past tense "skated"  Done

Y Playing style and Personal life sections are both ok

Citations

Y Early life section citations check out

Y "Due to their struggles, former Blue Jackets assistant coach Gary Agnew took over as head coach for the Generals in early November." The source behind the citation is just a hiring announcement but does not say why he was hired.  Done

Y Playing career Amateur Spot checked the majority and the rest of citations and they line up.

Y Professional Early years (2012–2016) "Jenner and fellow rookie Jack Johnson scored their first playoff goals within three minutes of each other during Game 3" this might be a slight misinterpretation of the reference, it actually says "scoring a pair of goals in the first three minutes"  Done

Y Professional Early years (2012–2016) "Following his successful rookie season, Jenner was held to only 31 games during the 2014–15 NHL season due to various injuries" this line needs a reference because it is not supported by the citation.

• @Bruxton: Done. I actually added a lot here so you may want to re-review this paragraph. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 22:01, 23 March 2024 (UTC)

Y Finding post-season success, captaincy (2016–present) (to be done) Not an error, but should we list his nickname in the article? Bam Bam?

• I don't think that is a common enough nickname. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 15:44, 23 March 2024 (UTC)

Y Finding post-season success, captaincy (2016–present) citations support the text in the rest of the section

Y Playing style citation supports the section

Y Personal life citations support the section

Y Career statistics I must admit I was not sure if this section needed to be cited. I checked other sports articles Tom Brady and Aaron Rodgers and I see that these types of charts are not cited.

Y Awards and honours section the citation supports this section

Images

Y There are three images used in the article and all seem to be properly licensed and free.

Chart

100% reviewed

   

Rate	Attribute	Review Comment
1. Well-written:
	1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.	Yes
	1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.	Yes
2. Verifiable with no original research:
	2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.	Yes
	2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).	Yes
	2c. it contains no original research.	Yes
	2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism.	Yes
3. Broad in its coverage:
	3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.	Yes
	3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).	Yes
	4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.	Yes
	5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.	Yes
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
	6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.	Yes
	6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.	Yes
	7. Overall assessment.	Good work! Thank you for contributing a good article!

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