Talk:Blow (Ed Sheeran, Chris Stapleton and Bruno Mars song)/GA1

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Reviewer: Truflip99 (talk · contribs) 05:05, 20 April 2020 (UTC)

Will start soon. --truflip99 (talk) 05:05, 20 April 2020 (UTC)

• In the music video, directed by Mars and Florent Dechard, Sheeran, Mars and Stapleton are replaced by an all-female rock band. -- too many commas; alt: "In the music video—directed by Mars and Florent Dechard—Sheeran..."
• This led to him to ponder working -- led him to*
• Mars, not only handled the production -- omit comma
• "distorted electric guitar riff". -- shouldn't the period be inside quotes? There are numerous instances where you do and don't do this; please pick one.
• composed in the key of E-flat minor, with a tempo of 92 beats per minute -- omit comma
• The singers' vocal ranges span from the low note of B4 to the high note of E6. -- a low note, a high note
• These lyrics are mixed with references to guns and sexual innuendo[30][31] ss -- typo? also, prefer you place refs at the end of sentences
• like Ed Sheeran making "marketable pop music" . -- omit space
• Jason Lipshutz writing for Billboard enjoyed the track as the trio are "vocal pros and adapt to the sound capably", handling the style of the single. -- I think the comma def should be inside the quotes here
• Mike Nied of Idolator lauded the collaboration as it was "surprising" the singers reaching "common ground on a rock-infused anthem". -- the singers reached a*; full stop inside?
• Seth Wilson from Slant Magazine was disapproval towards the lyrics, as they "make L.A. Guns seem like Nobel laureates". -- full stop inside?
• Wilson concluded that "Blow" shows the problem with the album, "Sheeran opts to avoid his strengths." -- in that* "Sheeran opts...
• saying that there is "nothing fun about the actual process of listening". -- full stop inside?
• "Please believe me when I say blood sweat and tears went into the making of this masterpiece". -- full stop inside?
• model/actress DeBarge, who wears a black cowboy hat -- too many commas; place the aside in parentheses instead

What do you mean with the "aside"? MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 20:00, 20 April 2020 (UTC)

as in (who wears a cowboy hat).

• gets the crowd excited, and lip-syncs -- omit comma

@MarioSoulTruthFan: Article looks great apart from the punctuation issues. I, for one, am quite confused with the British style of punctuation, but I see both British and American styles in this article. Pleas pick one. Anyway, thanks for improving this page. This American Ed Sheeran fan appreciates it. --truflip99 (talk) 17:45, 20 April 2020 (UTC)

@Truflip99: On the English Wikipedia, use the "logical quotation" style in all articles, regardless of the variety of English in which they are written. → henceforth you see differences. More info: here. I address all the other comments and left a comment there too. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 20:00, 20 April 2020 (UTC)

I figured you were on top of it. It's still a bit much for my tiny brain to wrap around, so I trust your judgement. Passing after that final comment is addressed. Cheers! --truflip99 (talk) 20:08, 20 April 2020 (UTC)

@Truflip99: Done. Thank you for taking your time to review the article, is very much appreciated. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 22:28, 20 April 2020 (UTC)