Talk:Ave Maryam/GA1
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Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 13:11, 29 January 2021 (UTC)
Infobox and lead
edit- In the infobox, add a release location after "11 April 2019".
- I trimmed to just the theatrical release.
- The film premiering at the Hanoi International Film Festival should still be mentioned.
- Done.
- The film premiering at the Hanoi International Film Festival should still be mentioned.
- Running time and box office parameters need references.
- It's covered in the Release section, so I don't think it's needed.
- "1 hour 25 minutes" → "85 minutes"
- Done.
- In the infobox, link Rp.
- Done.
- "Ave Maryam was premiered" → "Ave Maryam premiered"
- Done.
- Did the film premiere at the Hanoi International Film Festival or the Tempo Film Festival?
- The Tempo Film Festival does not have screenings; they merely share accolades and no showcase of the film.
- The sentence "It attracted an audience of 80,000 in 39 theaters nationwide." seems unnecessary in the lead.
- Removed.
- Everything else looks good.
Plot and cast
edit- "dipite the sisters" → "despite the sisters"
- Done.
- The sentence "The 10-year-old (now 12) Samarangan has her debut here" should probably be moved to #Production.
- It would be really weird to have a single paragraph stating that. I don't think there are problems with this.
- I think the issue is that the sentence doesn't sound like something from Wikipedia and also sounds trivial.
- Some Dude From North Carolina, hmmm, why? I think it's worth noting that a major role had her debut here. Doesn't sound like WP:TRIVIA to me. GeraldWL 07:45, 31 January 2021 (UTC)
- Well, the "10-year-old (now 12)" doesn't sound right. Maybe change it to "The then 10-year-old Samarangan has her film debut here." And it also feels off that she's the only one with a description, so that's why I recommend moving the fact to #Production.
- Some Dude From North Carolina, hmmm, why? I think it's worth noting that a major role had her debut here. Doesn't sound like WP:TRIVIA to me. GeraldWL 07:45, 31 January 2021 (UTC)
- I think the issue is that the sentence doesn't sound like something from Wikipedia and also sounds trivial.
Production
edit- A reference is needed for the title being changed.
- Does it need references? The fact that other sources after the Hanoi premiere title it Ave Maryam is basically a reference in itself.
- Per google translate: "We wanted to make the film honestly, so we've taken that risk" → "We are making this film honestly, so we are ready to bear the risk"
- Done.
- This reference doesn't actually say filming ended on 5 December 2016, so add a reference that does or just mention that filming ended after nine days.
- I think that using basic calculation, we are safe to assume such, right?
- Well, it depends if the article is counting 26 November as one of the nine days, or if its saying filming ended after nine days from 26 November.
- Done.
- Well, it depends if the article is counting 26 November as one of the nine days, or if its saying filming ended after nine days from 26 November.
- "realized she is Muslim after production" → "realized she was Muslim after production"
- Done.
- Since it was just moved: "The then 10-year-old Samarangan has her film debut here." → "Additionally, Nathania Angela also stars in her first film role" or something similar.
Music
edit- Citing the credits after "Rooftopsound" doesn't seem right. Try finding a secondary source.
- Removed.
- Same issue after "Saras vocalizes the melody".
- Removed.
- The final sentence needs a reference.
- I think the film in itself makes of a fine primary source. If people want to know if the song is actually the stated titles, they can just listen to it and verify it.
- The whole point of Wiki-articles is to have enough sources that verify information without the need of watching the subject, in this case, the movie.
- Well you have book sources, video game sources, movie sources. Paywalled sources are definitely hard to access, but the whole point is that there is encyclopedic information in it. I tried finding online sources about the featured hymns, but there are sadly none. GeraldWL 07:45, 31 January 2021 (UTC)
- The whole point of Wiki-articles is to have enough sources that verify information without the need of watching the subject, in this case, the movie.
Release
edit- "Ave Maryam was premiered" → "Ave Maryam premiered"
- Done.
- There are references for the film getting 42,044 and 77,000 viewers, but a citation is still needed for the 80,000 viewers.
- Removed.
- Remove the sentence "The film is rated 16+ on Netflix." as it seems trivial.
- Done.
Reception
edit- "..." → "[...]"
- Done.
- Everything else looks good.
Accolades
edit- All citations in the references column should be centered.
- Done
- "Best Supporting Actor" → "Tempo Supporting Actress Choice"
- Done.
- Additionally, the award should be in alphabetical order per consistency with other articles.
I'll do this (and the first point) later on.I don't think this is a violation of the MOS, and I don't think it has to be reorded just because other articles does so. GeraldWL 17:34, 30 January 2021 (UTC)
- Well, the suggestion was to make it easier for readers. Having the list in order depending on the first column is an example of WP:OTHER.
Overview
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Notes
edit- @Gerald Waldo Luis: Hey, I'm going to be reviewing this article. Expect comments later in the week. Some Dude From North Carolinawanna talk? 13:11, 29 January 2021 (UTC)
- Thanks for picking this up! You don't have to ping me anymore; I've placed this in my watchlist. GeraldWL 13:41, 29 January 2021 (UTC)
- Okay. Well, I just added most of my notes. Ping me back when you have added comments, but keep in mind that I won't be able to respond tomorrow (today in UTC time) until at least 7 pm ET (12 am UTC) due to stuff. Hope I can promote this article soon.
Some Dude From North Carolinawanna talk? 01:35, 30 January 2021 (UTC)
- Some Dude From North Carolina, I have responded to
mostall of your comments!I'll do the other 2 points point later; it might take me time.Looking forward for progress in this review. GeraldWL 08:21, 30 January 2021 (UTC)- I have added a few comments. Some Dude From North Carolinawanna talk? 00:45, 31 January 2021 (UTC)
- I added a final note to #Production. Ping me back, and I will promote the article. Some Dude From North Carolinawanna talk? 23:01, 31 January 2021 (UTC)
- Some Dude From North Carolina, I have responded to
- Okay. Well, I just added most of my notes. Ping me back when you have added comments, but keep in mind that I won't be able to respond tomorrow (today in UTC time) until at least 7 pm ET (12 am UTC) due to stuff. Hope I can promote this article soon.
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