Talk:Avar–Byzantine wars

Latest comment: 6 years ago by Gog the Mild in topic GA Review
Good articleAvar–Byzantine wars has been listed as one of the Warfare good articles under the good article criteria. If you can improve it further, please do so. If it no longer meets these criteria, you can reassess it.
Article milestones
DateProcessResult
March 13, 2018Good article nomineeListed
May 15, 2018WikiProject A-class reviewNot approved
Current status: Good article

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To check as many errors as possible in the references and/or notes, I recommend using User:Lingzhi/reviewsourcecheck in conjunction with two other scripts. You can install them as follows:

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GA Review

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This review is transcluded from Talk:Avar–Byzantine wars/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Gog the Mild (talk · contribs) 10:32, 12 March 2018 (UTC)Reply

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Good Article Status - Review Criteria

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Review

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  1. Well-written:
  2. Criteria Notes Result
    (a) (prose) The reviewer has no notes here.   Pass
    (b) (MoS) The reviewer has no notes here.   Pass
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    (a) (references) The reviewer has no notes here.   Pass
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    (c) (original research) The reviewer has no notes here.   Pass
    (d) (copyvio and plagiarism) The reviewer has no notes here.   Pass
  5. Broad in its coverage:
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    (a) (major aspects) The reviewer has no notes here.   Pass
    (b) (focused) The reviewer has no notes here.   Pass
  7. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
  8. Notes Result
    The reviewer has no notes here.   Pass
  9. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
  10. Notes Result
    The reviewer has no notes here.   Pass
  11. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
  12. Criteria Notes Result
    (a) (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales) Good use of maps. Very helpful.   Pass
    (b) (appropriate use with suitable captions) The reviewer has no notes here.   Pass

Result

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Result Notes
  Pass A solid, unusually well referenced, unusually well illustrated, and well written article leaving an assessor with little to do. Good use of maps. Classy work. Gog the Mild (talk) 20:41, 13 March 2018 (UTC)Reply

Discussion

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Please add any related discussion here.

  • Ref 24, Curta, is not linked.
  •   Done
  • Only 1 of your 13 sources has publisher location. (For information only, not a fail issue at B class.)
  •   Done

Prose (most of these are just suggestions):

  • "...while the Persians and Avars siege Constantinople in 626." Should be "besiege" (or "lay siege to") - first caption.
  •   Done
  • "conflicts were first initiated in 568". Initiated implies first.
  •   Done
  • "The Avars usually raided the Balkans when the Byzantine Empire was distracted elsewhere, usually in its frequent wars with the Sassanid Empire in the East." Replace the second "usually" with "typically"? Or the first.
  •   Done
  • "but allegedly sent 10,000 sent Kotrigur Huns"
  •   Done
  • "and a further eight of nine cities in 586." This doesn't really make sense. Which 9 cities?
    The source doesn't mention the names, unfortunately, just that 9 were sieged and 8 (of the nine) were captured. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 20:05, 13 March 2018 (UTC)Reply
  • "The next year, in 602, the Antes began to invade the Avars" I am not sure that one can invade a people. "invade the Avars' lands" perhaps?
  •   Done
  • "Byzantine naval superiority also made communication between the two forces more difficult." I am not sure that "more is necessary.
  •   Done
  • "which remained until their conquest by Charlemagne." It would be helpful to give a date for this event. Gog the Mild (talk) 18:43, 12 March 2018 (UTC)Reply
  •   Done

Infobox:

  • "Territorial changes: Balkans annexed by Avars, continually recaptured until final Avar possession." This doesn't match too well with the last section of the article. I can't actually think of a better way to phrase things, but I flag it up in case you can. Gog the Mild (talk) 22:31, 12 March 2018 (UTC)Reply
  •   Done

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